I TRY

I know you all love me

i know you all care,

I also know theres things about me

you wish wernt there. 

Mother oh Mother

I TRY to give as much as i can Give, 

I know how bad things are

i know your stuggling to live. 

I give you as much rent as i can

I sometimes get you food,

and for you to say i should be doing more

Well..... thats just rude. 

Mark oh Mark, my other half

the one i love so much,

I know seeing me cry all the time

that must be tough. 

Im to emmotional and a little to striaght out

im sorry I TRY,

You love me so much

i know you could never say goodbye.

My friends once so close

now were so far apart,

I really am sorry

I TRY with all my heart.

Sometimes i cant afford to meet up

but when i can I TRY,

It seems like im the one putting all the effort in

Tell me why?

Others say I dont have enough confidence,

im lazy, to clingy, depressed,

You can all shutup

give me a break give it a rest.

I TRY to be the best i can be, 

All that there is the best of ME.

Reviews

[Sarmelendez]

I really like this. The way you have written it is just so good. i felt the emotion behind it.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

thanks sarah your feedback means alot, glad you enjoyed it

[❀ Gabriela ..]

I like the rhyme scheme of this very much! ^^ Very nice and full of emotion, great writing!

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Thanks so much glad u enjoyed it

[LaVonneTheLovely]

This is very candid, and very clear to me! I really like it. Keep pouring you heart out - I believe it makes for the very best poems.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

very true poems are all about emmotion :) thank you much appreciated :)

[LaVonneTheLovely]

you're very welcome!

[mark]

wow!!!! i love this poem. and all of it is so true ur an awesome writer babe keep at it dont give it up :) i wish i can write like you :(

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

its not that good :P Thank u hunny means allot im glad you think im really good coz im so pashionate about it. Im deffs not giving it up :P U are an amazing writer bubz how many views u get on ur poem hmmmm. More then me u a*****e :P

[mark]

ur welcome sweety this is great how can u say ur not good? im only good at writing about u i wanna write more but i cant write about anything else :( i need some tips :P good dont give up...i got 68 views i think. im trying to think of new things to write about but i cant :/

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

u have way more views then me and i have had mine up longer. I was like that at the start to hun couldn't write anything but things to do with love im getting better though just gotta think.

[mark]

i know i got no brain to think im hopeless and yeah thats the only one i will be getting alot of views on :( ur way better than me i know im good when i write bout u thats all i know wat to write about.

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

ull get better its hard to write about other things besides love love is easy to write about. Im way beter at love poems

[mark]

yeah its very hard to think of things :( i wish i was like u