Because I Can't

Love Poem I composed for anyone

On the day I decided to bury you

deep in the cemetery of oblivion

 

I gathered all the roses in blue, gray

and black colors - to symbolize hate

 

Yet it cannot change the delightful

color of your memento of moments

 

and the smear of your memory

is deeply tinted into solid color

 

I like to brush off the permanence

of your tattoo dotted in my heart

 

by strong detergent called as amnesia

yet it won't wash away the color of your love

 

And I tried to freeze that warm affection

it just melted to crystalline endearment

 

To ignore the pureness of your love, compassion

the more my heart is in ire of fire of passion

 

 

 

Ency Bearis

All Rights Reserved 2012

Reviews

[Prritiy]

beautiful! just like your heart :)

[Ency Bearis]

Thanks Prritiy

[Prritiy]

:)

[Saumya]

thats!!!!!.................outstanding!!!!!!!!!!!111111

[Ency Bearis]

Thanks saumya srivastawa

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

This is a unique poem, though cemetery seems not that elegant word to combined with oblivion, but I still I embrace it just like the other word detergent. This is stunning, I love it Sir Ency, love this couplets:

I like to brush off the permanence
of your tattoo dotted in my heart

[Ency Bearis]

That first stanza is a metaphor - to forget everything - although the poem is a metaphor in a sense. Thanks for reading it and with your comments Marc.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Welcome the pleasure is mine :)

[Ency Bearis]

: )

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Nice poem, Sir Ency...for anyone. Lol. :) I love couplets. :)

I am again confused with this phrase "cemetery of forget". Just like in your last line, the phrase "fire of passion", it's correct. The word that goes after the preposition "of" should be a noun, which is then called "object of preposition. "forget" can't be an object of preposition so it can be made into a noun (forgetfulness or forgetting). Hope it can help.

Sir, ha? Baka naman magalit ka na sa akin...no offense, please. Peace. Smile. :)

[Ency Bearis]

Bakit naman ako magagalit. I told you everybody has a flaw, so therefore I am not perfect. Remember I am not a writer and what the critiques suggest I look into it. And, I learn with my mistakes. I love to put my work in internet first so some can see my works, if there are some suggestions I considered those suggestions. Then I finally put a final touch to manuscript if I want to put it in a book. There are some professional writers and published authors that read my works, they made suggestions. I was surprised with those people and overwhelmed that they reading and like my works. One of them is an Editor of New York Times and had suggested me to publish my work in a book, so I did. That's good to pre - publish your work first like this site, and anybody can take a look of that flaw. Ika nga - Two head are better than one. So I'm not offended with any critiques good or bad. Everyday is a learning process and you have not to stop. Okay ba yong logic na yon.And I see it you are right. So thanks for that. I can change it - you may notice too that phrase is a metaphor.

[Ency Bearis]

Sorry for the typo error there - I mean - Two heads are better than one.

[Ency Bearis]

I changed the word forget to oblivion - more appropriate word as you suggested -dhaye.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Yes, Sir. Oblivion is a noun and is synonymous to forgetfulness.
Oh, di ba, sobrang ganda na talaga siya. I like it so much lalo na made up of couplets. Kasi ganun talaga ako eh. Pag maganda para sa akin, mas ok pag ma-improve siya. Tsaka, pag ok na saka ko lang nilalagay sa library. hehe.
You can call me dhaye or eyahd, Sir Ency. Lol. :)