Dark Cloud

My feelings for you were once to deep

but now when I see you I feel this dark cloud come over me.

I feel anger stewing inside.

I feel hurt coming by me.

I feel the past creeping to me.

I cared so much.

And all you cared about was what people thought

And what other girls you could flirt with.

You were a player.

You never took a time out,

always stayed in the game,

without shame.

You were like broken glass.

until you shattered.

You were once so sweet.

I really cared.

But now when I see you...

I feel darkness and hate.

You're like a dark cloud.

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

There were numerous grammatical errors here, you should overlook them and correct them. Otherwise, this poem is quite clear and expresses the hatred felt when a person discovers that their lover is merely only around for awhile, and will soon move onto something physically 'better'. Damn people like they.
Great job.