The remains

The remains

A Poem by black.butterfly

The remains

 

The year flies as months turn to days;

my heartbeat--a ticking clock for a final countdown,

as my life flashes in preposterous ways

and reunites with the words at my provincial town.

 

Although pampered with literary passion,

I am suddenly forged through maturity,

learning how to swim by old fashion

to find my way to the shore of security.

 

My heart floats like white sea foam

in tenacious reminisce of all that remains;

   all the sadness that is taking me back home

as the ever-changing sky rains.

 

As I reach the end I don't recognize faces,

my lips no longer speak with hesitation

and my heart no longer races.

The words were my last salvation.

© 2012 black.butterfly


Author's Note

black.butterfly
Hello :)

Its been almost a year since I posted my last work on this site---and god did I miss it. <3
So, here is something I wrote recently. Hope you like it.
Reviews and constructive criticism are welcomed.

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This has really great flow! And I just want to add lol, that you posted this two days after I left to basic military training for the Air Force. (:

Posted 11 Years Ago


I like it. It flows well tells well and I'm glad you're back and coping.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Good to have you back. You came back with a amazing poem. We learn by chance and hope. Life teaches us to be strong and wiser. I like the flow of thoughts and the strong ending. Thank you for your outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very constructive

Posted 12 Years Ago


Very beautiful and touching. Makes me think back a bit on my past. Makes me think on how things have changed for me personally so much, and how they had been horrible yet started to get better. This touched me deeply. Very well done. I'm so glad that you started writing on here again. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


The Phoenix has risen, like how this piece comes together.
Excellent write.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I think it is very nice.
Broad and open yet personal, tangible, and something we can relate to.
I like how its kindof reminicent of bad times in younger days,
Because nobody really thinks about what happens after those days.
I think it is very poetically textured.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Once again, a great piece and beautiful writing.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Great write.

Adalynn

Posted 12 Years Ago



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