A plea to heaven

poem

For the tears we wept
over the regrets we kept
and the sadness we slept
away in the life we left.

White prayers reach to heaven.
Even though the skies are seven
and wings are never given,
please answer our vision.

Here our plea starts.
Angels, save our hearts,
so that our past departs,
for we are the broken parts.

Thus, our light shall never be slimmer,
never a hindered glimmer,
never marching to a different drummer,
until our futures shimmer.

Author's Note

rrviews and critisicm are welcomed.

Reviews

[zainul]

Lovely write

[JRB]

NICE WRITE SWEET THOUGHTS

[Philomela Titania Lanx]

I really enjoyed this. The rhyming was great. I disagree with YouOweYouPay; I think the drummer fit great. Never stop writing! :)

[YouoweYoupay]

I'm not sure about the 'drummer' in such a serene, sorrowful poem, but all else is fine. You write good rhymes and meaningful prayers. Beautiful. Keep it up.

"Angels, save our hearts,
so that our past departs,
for we are the broken parts."

[Angela]

"for we are the broken parts", Lovely. Your poems are full of feeling

[Tate Morgan]

That was very interesting and im guessing not easy to writ

[SamBug]

Wow. Great choice of words. This was truly amazing!!!!

[Mauricio Montoya]

I like the first stanza;
For the tears we wept
over the regrets we kept
and the sadness we slept
away in the life we left.
There are some things we won’t forget and hold dear to our hearts,
But life goes on, we must let go and grow.
Great job, well done.

[chillz]

great write I really enjoyed it! beautiful work ^-^

[Coyote Poetry]

A powerful and beautiful poem. I do believe prayers do assist us. It help us feel we are not alone. A very good ending of a outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote