Count to Three.

Poem

Count to three

When I count to three,
this thing between you and me;
all illusions hypnotizing,
will forever disappear,
as if they were never here.

Yes, you are the one,
my very own midnight sun,
but waiting is agonising,
for you never want to see
what you are truly to me.

A life shared by two,
that is what I see in you;
passion is mesmerizing.
Thus my heart belongs
right between your arms.

I want to count to three
and see you set me free,
for silence is paralyzing,
since I see your eyes scream,
that is the only way I dream.

Author's Note

Reviews are welcomed.

Reviews

[Patches I'm not so new..]

I am confused does the persona want or not want the subject of the poem?
it is well written but confusing to me

[Ross Saunders]

Very nice work here.

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Very well written, nice poem.

[Ashley Myers]

All i can say is YOURE GOOD!

[Huggy Bear]

I love it. Very beautiful written.

[Mauricio Montoya]

great job well done.

[Sasha]

I didn't even notice the one, two, three until Havatara pointed it out. Crazy Awesome!
I love the last 3 lines. beautiful.

[Havatara]

I liked how you had "one, two, three" in the poem. It fit in smoothly. Great job.

[Cassiopia Summers]

This is a story of broken love and wishing to be set free. You can feel the subjects yearning to be set free from the pain, and we can feel it. Great write.

[YouoweYoupay]

I agree with Bard. I loved the part of the eyes screaming too. The first few lines were attarctive to read. A broken love told in stanzas. Good write. Keep it up.