Memories

love will live on

Memories

In my memories you are there,
standing as light as air
with a grin on your face,
reaching arms for a sweet embrace.

How come you are not here?
does magic work by a tear?
because I have cried,
but no matter how I tried,
you are not here.
That is what I fear.

Regardless of how real you seem,
you are nothing but a dream
I can never realize.
That is what my memories verbalize.

I think of death,
in every breath
as I take your absence in.
My heart wants to give in.
I live to see it
slowly bit by bit.

Still I do not want you to die,
even if you are a white lie;
you live in me
as I can see,
as I dive really deep
into silent sleep.

As I wake up I remember;
I go through our anger,
through our laughter,
how we met on December
during that cold winter,
that will forever linger.

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed~

Reviews

[Masaking]

I feel you XD

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Great writing, and I think I also agree with M. Kilani.

[Ashley Myers]

i agree with M. KILANI

[Rhonda]

i think that most people can relate. good job :)

[xNote_to_selfx]

This is great, and very meaningful. You've got a talent for poems :)

[Cristal Bridges]

This is beautiful. I imagine drifting on a lonely sea while reading this. A dark, desolate, black sea of longing and despair. Wonderful fluid work.

I think the ideaa of this poem was quite beautiful, and the first two lines create a powerful image. However, I think it would've have been more moving as a freeverse poem because the cliche rhymes ruin the feeling of the piece.

[M.Kilani]

as your other poems this is outstanding, I loved the six-line stanzas they flow wonderfully !! the AA,BB... style of writing suits you, I believe you should try AB,AB rhyming as well, you'd do a great job with that .
I can easily relate to it emotionally.
well done

[Richard McLin]

A very powerful piece. This is some of the best poetry I've read on this website. Very good poem.

-Richard

[lavina k.]

Amazing and a very sweet poem.
I m not able to present my words, its like beautiful what i felt, everything of my fears, of my dreams, of whatever i think is there in this poem.
You stole my thoughts
heheh Just kiddin
But you showed a trueness!!!
Thanks for sharing!!!