Rain

Rain


Rain...oh please rain,
wash away our pain;
it's too agonizing,
for we regretted before realizing.
Don't just hide our tears,
for we can't face our fears.

For you fall from a sky,
that for us will always cry,
since we're mostly feeling blue.
You realize It's sad but true.
With umbrellas on the ground,
we're crying with no one around.

Rain...oh heavy rain,
you aren't what we want to gain,
but with our hearts heavy, scared
and full of secrets unshared,
you might mend our scars,
for you came down from the stars.

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed~

Reviews

[M.Kilani]

I could almost swear that I wrote this one !! or at least wrote something alike I guess it was a poem called October, the rhyme is just perfect !! the kind of rhyme I'd like to read and write as well .
well done , and best regards ;)

[Havatara]

The rhyming in this was so seamless that I didn't even realize that it was rhymed until the end of the poem. Very well done.

[Coyote Poetry]

A grand wish. If rain could wash away all the pain and sadness. A rainy day would be very popular. The poem is very good. Poor rain had many purposes. I like the ending. A beautiful wish and excellent poem.
Coyote

[Cassiopia Summers]

I agree with Crusaderscross, the poem is all over but for the subject it works well, and the rhyme is absolutely amazing.

[Crusaderscross]

This poem is all over the place, but in a good way. I usually do not like rhymes but here it works well. Your choice of words is really well done. Bravo

[Sasha]

crazy emotion just flowing here!
it's awesome how you've combined rain and human emotion so skillfully.
it's also rare to see people write about rain and tears and still not directly associate the two. great job!

[r]

beautiful poem, the last two lines are my favorite "you might mend our scars,///for you came down from the stars" Amazing. :)

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Nice poem.

[Mauricio Montoya]

I like how you used the rain describe this emotion.
Excellent write.

[Senseless whatever]

Nice write. Sad but not overwhelming. Makes me feel a longing for forgiveness or understanding.