Something is wrong

Something is wrong

A Poem by black.butterfly
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Something is wrong

When you said your goodbyes
without looking me in the eyes,
my pride had to play along.
So ofcourse, something was wrong.

I wished faith could carry me away,
that by love hearts could sway,
but it wasn't where i should belong.
Something was awfully wrong.

Then It didn't matter who was who,
even when it was me and you.
I learned how to be strong
and yet something was just wrong.

Three years of doing this and that,
yet in every place i set at,
I clench when i hear our song.
Something is still wrong.

© 2010 black.butterfly


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this is so beautifully done..certainly something is wrong when its goodbye
even if i try to stand my place and take what may come
even if i stay strong and never waver,something is wrong
when i sit and think of whats past..when i hear the song
sweet music where i used to belong ,always knew something was wrong
so beautiful writing..full of sweet longing even if something was all wrong
lovely write..

Posted 14 Years Ago


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This kind of reminds me of the song, The Sea Angler by Faith & the Muse. It's very dark and cold but touching. It's so sad to lose someone you loved and them realize that nothing is quite the same without them. Nice piece.

Posted 14 Years Ago


Reminiscing of lost love can indeed
be haunting. Genuflecting to some
thing you feel went wrong. A very
solid write BB

Posted 14 Years Ago


I can complete relate to this poem. I virtually felt every line, as if my own heart was speaking its unspoken, unanswered questions; of love, love lost, love stained, love that never went no where. I love this poem because it is now very personal to me. Thank you.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I liked this piece of your collection. A good one!!!!!!!!

Posted 14 Years Ago


this is so beautifully done..certainly something is wrong when its goodbye
even if i try to stand my place and take what may come
even if i stay strong and never waver,something is wrong
when i sit and think of whats past..when i hear the song
sweet music where i used to belong ,always knew something was wrong
so beautiful writing..full of sweet longing even if something was all wrong
lovely write..

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very emotional poem... I can relate to this poem... everything goes on and still at the back of your mind you feel as if something is wrong... very nicely expressed, great write

Posted 14 Years Ago


Life is hard and you illustrate this well:) Great Job

Posted 14 Years Ago


Very nice write here. The gradual departure of a relationship. The feelings of something not right leading to the demise, or did it actually ever end?

Posted 14 Years Ago


Wow can relate with this piece! :) And break ups can definitely be a painful experience, even if it's left on good terms. I like how you keep repeating that something is wrong, even when in some of the lines there seems to be progression or 'hope'....
Well done :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


I really liked how you kept repeating how wrong you felt. I could feel my heart clutch up (if that makes sense). Well done.

Posted 14 Years Ago



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