this is so beautifully done..certainly something is wrong when its goodbye
even if i try to stand my place and take what may come
even if i stay strong and never waver,something is wrong
when i sit and think of whats past..when i hear the song
sweet music where i used to belong ,always knew something was wrong
so beautiful writing..full of sweet longing even if something was all wrong
lovely write..
This kind of reminds me of the song, The Sea Angler by Faith & the Muse. It's very dark and cold but touching. It's so sad to lose someone you loved and them realize that nothing is quite the same without them. Nice piece.
I can complete relate to this poem. I virtually felt every line, as if my own heart was speaking its unspoken, unanswered questions; of love, love lost, love stained, love that never went no where. I love this poem because it is now very personal to me. Thank you.
this is so beautifully done..certainly something is wrong when its goodbye
even if i try to stand my place and take what may come
even if i stay strong and never waver,something is wrong
when i sit and think of whats past..when i hear the song
sweet music where i used to belong ,always knew something was wrong
so beautiful writing..full of sweet longing even if something was all wrong
lovely write..
A very emotional poem... I can relate to this poem... everything goes on and still at the back of your mind you feel as if something is wrong... very nicely expressed, great write
Wow can relate with this piece! :) And break ups can definitely be a painful experience, even if it's left on good terms. I like how you keep repeating that something is wrong, even when in some of the lines there seems to be progression or 'hope'....
Well done :)