Mirage

poem

Mirage

I am the mirror in your eyes,
brimming with unwavering dreams.
I am what reflects your blue skies,
consuming tears until your heart redeems.

You only see the mirage reflected by the hot sun
and neglect the other side of the new moon.
Breeze never blows until the day is done,
yet you dream of a sun that sets in the afternoon.

Do not wish your life away upon a shooting star,
stop looking up at the sky above
and face what and who you truly are!
Do not fly away and be with whom you truly love.

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed~

Reviews

[SamBug]

THis was amazing. I love the imagery you put forth in this piece. It makes it totally amazing!!!!

[Sincerely, Alex]

The imagary in this write was magnificent. Strong emotion.

[Senseless whatever]

Strong write. Powerful images and emotion.

[Huggy Bear]

The illusion you place here in this poem felt realistic.

[KatiePie]

This was beautiful it had a great flow to it. Wonderful work! ^_^
Cathrine

[Cristal Bridges]

This is magical! I love that you're bringing a message of don't end things just because you can't take the pain. I think that's a great message! Life is always hard for everyone in different ways. Some have it harder than other but in the end things usually and hopefully work out. I really like this a lot it's lovely but tinged with a droplet of sadness.

[Tainted Devotion]

Very beautiful and quite sad. I must say that I've been in this position quite a few times, but luckily stopped myself from doing anything stupid. It is true that harming one's self only brings unimaginable pain to those around them. It is rather pointless to end your own life. This poem is stunning and amazing. Well done indeed.

[FlawedByDesign]

I honestly don't know why people sometimes choose to end their lives and leave loved ones behind, because they end up causing unimaginable pain to those who care for them.
You give your shoulder to cry on and "consuming tears until your heart redeems."
And you really make a convincing point at the end with, "Do not fly away and be with whom you truly love." If your love does not make him consider staying, then it's a lost cause :(

Well done.

[Nathan Durham]

I loved this! Very beautiful, and I loved the way it rhymed. I really liked the end.

[Iota]

When I read this I can't help but to think about the past when I had someone in my life but still seek someone else, who was always out of reach. So much wasted time and energy dreaming upon a star. Many don't see what they really love until it is gone. Great write.