Mirage

poem

Mirage

I am the mirror in your eyes,
brimming with unwavering dreams.
I am what reflects your blue skies,
consuming tears until your heart redeems.

You only see the mirage reflected by the hot sun
and neglect the other side of the new moon.
Breeze never blows until the day is done,
yet you dream of a sun that sets in the afternoon.

Do not wish your life away upon a shooting star,
stop looking up at the sky above
and face what and who you truly are!
Do not fly away and be with whom you truly love.

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed~

Reviews

[Patches I'm not so new..]

well said I particularly enjoyed the last line

[Havatara]

This was a very touching poem. The imagery was beautiful, and it was simply amazing. Amazing piece.

[Su' Nacnetaf]

I love the message in this piece, I specially liked the "Do not wish your life away upon a shooting star" line. Poignant!

[Romeion Case]

this was pretty cool...very emotive and personable. :-) you've got skills.

[Jared]

Wow this is very very very good. 100 is well deserved.

[Blue tailed kite]

Love this poem... the imagery, the flow, the message... its beautiful. Love the way the poem began
I am the mirror in your eyes,
brimming with unwavering dreams.
I am what reflects your blue skies,
consuming tears until your heart redeems.
Great write :)

[C.L. Wilson]

i love it. How people can blind their selves with an idea that keeps them from seeing the truth, definitely know how that feels. Love the metaphorical analogy you give the sun. very refreshing to see something different than from the vice versa (how the sun is all revealing). Bravo

[Coyote Poetry]

A very interesting poem. Last line got my interest." Do not fly away and be with whom you truly love." Should they stay or go? I like the logic of your words. Better to live in the real world then a dream. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Bard Constantine]

Visually the poem strong. I offer that the rhyme could probably be tighter, could flow a bit better. Yet it doesn't take away from the beauty of the piece.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Poetry is an art and you’ve shown that here.
Excellent write.