juliet

poem

Juliet

 

I don’t want your diamonds neither your tears.

I’m not listening to your empty words now,

Neither wanting your whispers shoved into my ears.

Don’t tell me you love me, but show me how.

 

Believe me, I don’t need to know your name.

This is not a play, I only want your soul.

Although I’m Juliet, I want you to put Romeo to shame

And perfectly play your destined role.

 

Play me a dreamy song, that warms up the air,

Share your soul and lull me magically to sleep.

Keep me safe, while silently tugging at my hair.

Make me feel like a precious jewel you want to keep.

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed.

Reviews

[alesuriko]

Your rhyme is perfect in this piece, but your rhythm is really off and doesn't flow very smoothly. I did like the parody on Romeo & Juliet though. I really dislike that play, the worst Shakespeare's ever written (and I never insult Shakespeare). The content is really good though, despite the flow. I enjoyed the imagery and the wording.

[Iota]

Having high expectations is the beginning of a lasting relationship. Putting Romeo to shame, wow that may take some work on any guys part. That was my fav part of the poem. I am sure anyone who expects this will one day have it. Great write.

[Dom Macchiaroli]

Would that every guy be like this. I know I am not. Thanks for the reminder, and the admonition.....good stuff.

[Aislinn Gryffin ((Ashes..]

Wow...very well written. i could feel the desire throug the words.

[John Stussy]

Impactful. The desire seems to shimmer throughout the poem as if under candlelight. There's that soft desire to want the best lover ever there, and you conveyed that wish well. Putting Romeo to shame would be quite the task.