Glass Heart

A story of a naked soul

Glass Heart

 

When you invade my mind,

I desperately try to lie, but fail.

I look for a sanctuary I cannot find,

for I am the one you always trail.

 

My skin is see-through.

I am naked before your eyes.

I am the only thing true

and free of sought-after lies.

 

Tell me it is all right my lass;

words that will never scatter,

since my heart is that of glass.

Tell me that does not matter.

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed~
*Edited.

Reviews

[Undying Glory]

simple and yet impressive poem, i really like this poem. great

[Coyote Poetry]

I love the word lass. The poem is so powerful and strong. Every line was strong and made this poem a pleasure to be able to read.
"My skin is see-through.
I am naked before your eyes.'
These lines were so good. You can write a poem. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Love can make us feel so very vulnerable... a simple but powerful poem.

[ettorney]

Wow, very frank and dramatic poem about a fragile and vulnerable person.

[Tate Morgan]

I like it I think the last verse needs a better rhyme

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Heart of glass...indeed..
beautiful structure of poem.

[Dom Macchiaroli]

It's tough when we are sometimes so transparent. Fave part:

"When you invade my mind,

I desperately try to lie, but fail.

I look for a sanctuary I cannot find,

For I am the one you always trail."

Another good piece, as always.

[alesuriko]

I loved the use of "my lass" because of it, I went back and read the entire poem in an Irish accent. It kind of proved a little bit of awkwardness in the wording but I liked the imagery behind the words. It feels emotional and you can hear the desperation and vulnerability. The capitalization of "Put" whether purposeful or error was good, especially with the Irish accent because when I read it I gave it more emphasis and a bit of pause which really fit the accent well.

It is quite disturbing when someone sees you for you. Will they judge you harshly or embrace your entire being? I think in most cases it's best to stay closed, but it takes a lot of hard work to do it with style.

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. this has a mix of emotions within.. as well as many possibilities in meaning. I liked the overall portrait but found a sense of sadness to it.. one of being fragile and in need of repair and santuary. Although I could not get a full picture it was very well penned..