You drag my heart

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You drag my heart

 

You drag my heart down on the floor,

With a time-eaten rusty iron chain.

It’s nothing like I have ever seen before,

You cause me this unforgettable pain.

 

Is it that my waves crashed at your shore?

I do not see what you’re gonna gain.

You do not see what I’m crying oceans for,

For you heart breaking is simple and plain.

 

My heart was pierced deep into the core,

Yet bits and pieces of my soul were not slain.

For my resolve, you just wait one day more,

I’ll show you how much you are vain.

 

Author's Note

reviews r welcomed

Reviews

[Patches I'm not so new..]

WoW! your words magnificent poem you have penned

[Su' Nacnetaf]

Interesting, good writing.

[Mark Cope]

I like the continuation of the two rhymes in each stanza, keeping it simple, though I imagine quite hard to do. Nice one!

[Bhavya Kaushik]

The title really got my attention first, since "drag" is something which I was not able to relate with "heart", but anyways you pulled it brilliantly with this write...I liked it, it is emotionally very powerful

[Blue tailed kite]

Very emotional....n i like the power n resolve in the poem.... nice write :)

[Tate Morgan]

well done

Very emotional, powerful even! Beautiful!

[Holly]

"You drag my heart down on the floor,

With a time-eaten rusty iron chain." -

That line alone says more than the entire rest of the poem with beautiful detail and powerful conviction.

[Steve]

Well done! Its hard to make it come together isnt it? LOL Your words sound like they fit together nicely.

[Dom Macchiaroli]

Good write Butterfly. You put it all together very nicely.