Caged

poem

Caged

 

You’re not worth the wait,

Breaking promises one after another,

Yet not worth the hate,

For we once walked along together.

 

I did get mad and yell,

But it’s always my heart that cries,

Yet you couldn’t tell

and didn’t see through my lies.

 

Please, just go and  fly away.

Sorry for keeping you caged.

I don’t want to marry you anyway,

For you can’t handle being engaged.

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed.

Reviews

[Su' Nacnetaf]

The last stanza was magnificent! Great poem, thoroughly enjoyed.

[Vin]

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this, it was like quiet vengeance but with a sense of defeat, if that makes any sense haha. I loved the heartbreak and the way the speaker is letting the person go, even although they may not necessarily want to. Great job!

-Beth

[zogzog]

i like this....the last two lines kind of gave it a little humour. not sure if you had intended that but that is what i got from it....

Real life is heartbreak. Sometimes you think you've found the thorn-less rose, yet there it goes and pricks ya!

Short, powerful, dripping with venom like an assasin's dagger. Makes me think this is based on a real experience.

[Holly]

this one is a little simple but I like this more than some of your others because you communicated clearly with the reader and still it is pleasant to read.

[Jeff Bresee]

Funny... and better of it would seem.

[J. Alexis Balaguer]

Letting go is love. Holding on is attachment. The persona made a good decision.

My favorite lines:
Please, just go and fly away.
Sorry for keeping you caged.

Good poem.
Alex

[Alicante lullaby]

wonderful flow..it good to let flies fly away...you should shooo them up.

[Anicca]

This was a very real write in many ways but occasionally drifted into metaphor, I liked that style a lot! Nice write