The man with no face

Prologue

     The foggy view peeked from a pair of eyes, not that they were there. A man traced his face with what seemed to be two hands. A blade-like long nose, which used to center that face, was missing. He went on studying his own face, it was like a white board, untouched and lacking. He was a mass of flesh; his hands were inseparable long circular forms, coated with a strange, shimmering, wet and light-soaked velvet skin. He stood on his feet, nameless, faceless, and confused.

     How come he could see with no eyes? How come he knew this skin is not his? All what seemed real to him, was not what he perceived with his awareness, but that far-off memory in the back of his mind, blurry and barely there.

 

Author's Note

Hey, its been a while since i wrote anything so i thought of writing this prologue. So read, evaluate and enjoy. Reviews are welcomed though.

Reviews

[Patches I'm not so new..]

This is a very good start to something thart could be a powerful story/poem It draws the reader in and whets the appitite for more

[Su' Nacnetaf]

I'd like to see a longer story about this, "The Man With No Face" sounds interesting from the very beginning, the prologue leaves me wanting even more. It would make a great psychological/phylosophical writing if extended. Excellent writing.

[Clarisse Nanoit]

Interesting thought. While the grammar isn't perfect, I think it's interesting that not only are his facial features missing, but his hands also. They are so very expressive, just like our faces. I'm a hand person, so I noticed this, of course. lol.
KH

[Matthew Ian Herrawood W]

this good and I really want to read more this is the set up for a really good book. I dissagree with AJchallenger. this is one of the best proluges ive ever read "short sharp and shiny" in other words short but to the point and it grabs you from the first word and doesnt let go untill you finish reading. (Which AJchallenger is what a proluge is ment to do and when you have read as many PUBLISHED books as me you will understand this) the only problem i see with it this is that there isnt any more of this story to read PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!

[Dutch Jr.]

I would like to read some more of this... seems interesting.

[Ross Saunders]

I see this as a prose poem, possibly as the first in a sequence or the beginning of a fairly long poem. It stands well enough on it's own, but I think there could definitely be more to it than what you've got here.

[Elfinpunk]

also, please don't do what AJChallenger has proposed. That would make it boring. And everyone is experienced enough to know whether or not something sounds good to read and everyone is able to give their opinion without resorting to giving orders. :-)

[Elfinpunk]

wow. brilliant. That first line had me doing a double-take, it's really very good! I hope you're planning on continuing this?

[Undying Glory]

intriguing work, sure makes one want to read more. couldn't help but notice how conflicting everyone seems to be. anyway i think it's cool, so write on

[James Watts]

Hard to give a honest review on short pieces.It is well written and I would be interested in reading the first chapter.