Sugarcoated lies

poem

Sugarcoated lies

 

The sweet memories of happier days

Keep you away from facing the future

So good at easing your life’s craze

As you are missing the bigger picture

 

When your tears run down your cheeks

Rainbows are stretched through the sky

When the fear in your heart speaks

You keep it inside with a one simple lie

 

You try to keep your heart so white

Regardless of what you should be facing

But you need a different kind of light

And a future you should start chasing

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed~

Reviews

[We are young.]

The rhymes were very good, I over all loved the poem. Very intriguing.

[Luke Masters]

Loved the second stanza. Very beautiful. The rhymes here flowed perfectly for me.

[T. Hart]

I like the last stanza the most.
Very well done.

[Jen]

I think the poem flowed quite well, and the rhyme scheme as usual caught my eye (I love my rhyme scheme)... I also liked the overall content in this piece.

good write, keep it up (y)

[AJChallenger]

I think you've focused a bit to much on the rythm scheme and syntax and not enough on the flow. It's very sing-songy, which is good if that's the goal of this, but it makes it a bit difficult to read in terms of content.

[Coyote Poetry]

It is easy to become cold and leave the old dreams behind. But we pay for the mistakes later. Must figure a way to do everything we need to do in a life. I could feel the desire to move on to something different. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Tate Morgan]

this is stunning

[Austin Smith]

I can't say anything bad about it. Good job!

[deeps]

This is wonderful, amazing rhyme scheme as well.
I like this alot

[Ross Saunders]

Very nice. I really like your word choices and language here.