Sugarcoated lies

poem

Sugarcoated lies

 

The sweet memories of happier days

Keep you away from facing the future

So good at easing your life’s craze

As you are missing the bigger picture

 

When your tears run down your cheeks

Rainbows are stretched through the sky

When the fear in your heart speaks

You keep it inside with a one simple lie

 

You try to keep your heart so white

Regardless of what you should be facing

But you need a different kind of light

And a future you should start chasing

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed~

Reviews

[Patches I'm not so new..]

sounds to me as though you are trying to convince someone to let go of the past it is dead and only the future matters that's like saying the past is past the future holds the key it is the future holds the key today is the first day of the rest of your life Carpe Diem!

[Holly]

I decided to change my review, this ones my fav from this site right now.

[Su' Nacnetaf]

I liked the last stanza the most (as it appears to be usual with your poems for some reason), but that's not bad, it's just something funny I just noticed. Great writing.

[Clarisse Nanoit]

Thoughtful, but with most of your other pieces, I don't really like it. I think I'm just not a fan of your style. lol. Your style to me feels a little... lazy, perhaps? Idk if that's the right word, but it just feels like you don't even put effort into it. Idk. Maybe you did, but I don't sense it.

[Steve]

A very thoughtful, poetic, sweet piece.....

[Jeff Bresee]

Very nice again. I really like your work.

[Elfinpunk]

I liked it, but please forgive me for saying it was a lot more mundane and plodding than most of your other work (which i enjoy), but thankyou for sharing :-)

[Thomas B. Buckman]

Very complex. I take an enjoyable interest into the experiences that led you to writing this poem.
Awesome.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

a really good write all in all, the last stanza is very good