Because you left

poem

Because you left

Because you left the house on that day

The flowers in our garden aren’t growing

I put on a a fake smile in every way

Although weariness started showing

 

Ever since you left me behind like this

The blood in my veins stopped flowing

The pieces of my heart ache and miss

For its last piece is still lost and missing

 

I sent letters in hope of finding you

For you left the door open before leaving

Even if it’s a long time it will pass me through

Because you left me hurt yet worrying.

 

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed~

Reviews

[Antonio Valentino]

I know this feeling all too well.
Sad but there's some comfort in knowing others have gone through this same thing too.

Thanks for this poetess.
Really enjoyed!

Antonio

[Richard McLin]

Simply wonderful. Nothing more I can say. This was a fantastic piece.

-Richard

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I like this...very good.
Great Job

[Jeff Bresee]

Ohhh...hitting the heart a bit too close. Excellent.

[Stephen Scaggs]

Dear Writer,

This is a honestly well written poem. The bold title acts for repetition and re-emphasizes your point. A good rhyming sequence and flow to it. It has a lot of truth in the sincerity derived from the message. You are a talented writer, but there will always be room for improvement. Learn to use grammatical things like periods, commas, semi-colons, colons, quotations, et cetera.

It's a well written poem, good message, good flow, truth is mild, and so goes on down the list. Well done! 9.5/10.

A Friend and a Writer,
S. W. Scaggs

[Aekmy]

This is amazing. It portrays emotions well known to many.

-Kayla

[Tate Morgan]

It is so hard to beleft wondering

[Tate Morgan]

very nice

[Manda]

this was really emotional. i thought this was very well written piece! short and sweet too! well done and keep it up!

[deeps]

Such a powerful read here and sad.