Time heals

poem

Time heals

I dance under the rain
Like a kid once again
Raindrops stop so suddenly
So time heals occasionally

Don't forget a love you lived
Even if your feelings are mixed
If thorns hurt you by remembrance
Then roses gave you a beautiful fragrance

Look at the bond between your eyes
They sleep & cry together through the times
Although they never ever meet
Somehow together they are complete

That should always be you and I
Dont believe your delusional lie
Time heals broken hearts
And now our new beginning starts

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed~

Reviews

[emmajoy]

A really interesting and fine poem, full of hidden meanings but with a wonderfully warm, open ending.

Great lines: 'If thorns hurt you by remembrance Then roses gave you a beautiful fragrance'

[Colin Stewart]

TIME WILL ONLY HEAL IF WE ARE TO MEET!!!!
IT'S OBVIOUS YOU LOVE WORDS AND THAT WORDS LOVE YOU.
YOU ARE A CREATIVE ANOMALY IN THIS CIRCLE OF NATURE MY SWEET LITTLE BLACK BUTTERFLY!
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[Chris T.]

There is a great rhythm to this piece. The second and third read through allowed me to really dig into this, and I found it quite poignant. Really enjoyable. One line," Don't believe your delusional lie" was a little cumbersome compared to the rest, but it still works, just maybe something to refine if you are looking to do so.

[Taylor H.]

loved it

[Theresa]

I like the beginning how you create a picture. Love is something you dont forget whether the feelings are good or bad. It's hopeful at the end. Really enjoyed this nicely done.

[bluessadmood]

how i danced in the rain and i was a kid again
and i forgot,and you forgot how we once loved
your eyes how they cried and shine
and when met with mine ,see how complete we are
its always you and i,forget those heart once broken
there is always a new beginning
i read this many times over the last three days ,ha ha
i was not feeling good..but now i see what it could make
God how life is ever so strange
lovely write..

[Perdition]

I always feel like the heart of a poem is sometimes squeezed by the rhyme...Free flow allows the writer to speak without the message being lost in the style..Now that being said I still enjoyed the message and the softness and the poetry ...I would just love to see you rewrite this without the constraints of aa bb.

[Eternally Elemental]

There were a couple of little things that made a bump. For example the use of the word 'occasionally'. I couldn't make any sense out of it, it felt like it was a filler, simply to complete the rhyme.

Really loving the analogy with the eyes. What a beautiful and original idea.
The last lines rolled of the tongue, as if there is to be an unspoken continuation. Very nice.

A couple of bumps I noticed but overall a very good write. Nice read. Taking the eye analogy in my memories.

[AtticusBlack]

Glad you asked me to read this black.butterfly. It makes me curious of the story behind the words.

[apocalypse]

Spells hope witha hint of gloom in it. Your rhyming isn't strained, I like that alot. Good write.