Running in circles

poem

Running in circles

The closer you stand beside me,
While our eyes never meet,
The more distant we seem to be,
And the more my world is incomplete.

Should I shout your name out?
Or remain in my wordless wondering?
There are many things to talk about
will it be like my thousand days of lingering?

I am afraid of holding your hands,
What if they slip away?
Doubt shatters my dreamlands,
and turns my reddish sun into grey.

But the vivid picture of your face,
at the back of my head,
takes a small amount of space,
yet makes my cheeks turn red.

I keep running in this endless circle
just like how you make my blood flow
Love can be a curse or a miracle,
No one can ever predict or know.

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed~

Reviews

[marj]

I love 'reddish' as a modifier ... in comparison to the turning-red of the cheeks. That, and then blood, which is the reddest entity of the body. The juxtapositions of space are great.

I think the last line could be stronger, "no one can ever predict or know" ... it is a bit wordy and exaggerated.

other than that, great job!!

[Aekmy]

:D I love it. It flows so nicely and makes a lot of sense. Something I can relate to.
Awesome job.

-Kayla

[cecil]

written wit deep emotion and wisdom,your lines kept me feeling and allowed me to feel the agony of the uncertainty of the relationship.
love and life are never really certain and can flip flop so many times,,,Blessings..Cecil

[Bare trees]

Nice poem. I understand the uncertainty involved with decisions of the kind you speak of. You wrote this well with a nice flowing style. I liked how the last line summed up the poem. Good job.

[Iota]

I agree with kit kat, this is a well done poem. I do believe in speaking my mind and heart so I would not sit silently next to the one I loved. You hit a nice flow on this one, well done.

[deeps]

I think this is a very well written write here. Emotions are protrayed wonderful. Amazing flow as well.