After the 21st winter

for a year that starts anew

After 21th winter

Through her eyes, that had shed rivers,

pain and flesh became intertwined.

Now, her heart bursts and shivers,

for a fate it has been assigned.

 

Now, time has elapsed

and the rivers have dried out.

The heaviness in her heart collapsed,

so there is nothing to stir about.

 

A year where sun and clouds never meet;

it is the heart of a sky that never glooms.

Once more the pulses of hope beat

and a thornless red rose blooms.

Author's Note

All reviews are welcomed.
*Edited.

Reviews

[Marley]

Excellent stanzas. I like the short, straight to the point feel of this. But I almost feel that it need some explanation as to what it was that changed and made the rivers dry and the heaviness collapse. That might just be me, though... I do tend to be long winded. Asss made evident by this. Heh. Anyway.

I really do enjoy the rhyme and flow of this piece, though. It's very well balanced with each line and word. Great job. :]

[FlawedByDesign]

I've seen this poem from a different angle than the rest of the reviews suggest. The poem definitely speaks of the passage of time and the mending of the heart, but I've related it to the passing seasons. I'd say the heart was broken in the winter, hence the cold, then the summer has come along and "the rivers have dried out". It's sunny and things are looking up, so "there is nothing to stir about." The skies are clear and "never gloom" and roses bloom later than all other flowers.

I may be reading too much into it, but that's how I see it :)

Nicely done!

[Iota]

Time does heal all even our hearts so they can love again, your words are beautiful here and the message is strong. i like the ending thornless red rose blooms, yes it is inviting to love isn't it?

[WriderParker]

Beautiful poem about everyday life for some of us, the words are heart felt and give a great picture in the mind. And the overall message of "the light at the end of the tunnel" is one I always enjoy. And pre-Merry Christmas to you too lol

[Coyote Poetry]

Such power and strength in your words. Could feel the sadness and then the hope at the end of your poem. A excellent short poem.
Coyote

[Undying Glory]

ah yes, the vision to a new year...no matter how hopeless this year seems, there's always hope for us. excellent