After the 21st winter

for a year that starts anew

After 21th winter

Through her eyes, that had shed rivers,

pain and flesh became intertwined.

Now, her heart bursts and shivers,

for a fate it has been assigned.

 

Now, time has elapsed

and the rivers have dried out.

The heaviness in her heart collapsed,

so there is nothing to stir about.

 

A year where sun and clouds never meet;

it is the heart of a sky that never glooms.

Once more the pulses of hope beat

and a thornless red rose blooms.

Author's Note

All reviews are welcomed.
*Edited.

Reviews

[Marley]

Excellent stanzas. I like the short, straight to the point feel of this. But I almost feel that it need some explanation as to what it was that changed and made the rivers dry and the heaviness collapse. That might just be me, though... I do tend to be long winded. Asss made evident by this. Heh. Anyway.

I really do enjoy the rhyme and flow of this piece, though. It's very well balanced with each line and word. Great job. :]

[Patches I'm not so new..]

Wonderfully stated I think this is a "hope springs eternal" poem

[Su' Nacnetaf]

The last stanza was definitively my favorite, though the first two I may have misunderstood, I will read this until I fully get this piece's meaning. Great writing.

[Ross Saunders]

Very dark and cold. I liked this a lot just because of all the sensory elements it gives off. Well done.

This was a nice short piece. Beautiful imagery but just a little bit vacant. There is something missing. And the 21th part annoyed me, I kept think 21st, 21st, 21st, through the entire piece.

[Cassiopia Summers]

My favorite lines are "Once more the pulses of hope beat and a thornless red rose blooms. (: Great write, I love it.

[Richard McLin]

I actually like the "21 th" part of the title, it's different. I loved this piece, it was short, but the reader never feels cheated out of not getting a longer piece. You have written something here that is very very good.

-Richard.

[Dom Macchiaroli]

Have to agree with Hava on the '21th' thing. Unless there is some hidden meaning there. Otherwise, a good piece.

[alesuriko]

Very nice imagery in this piece, rather vivid. Good expression in this poem.

[Havatara]

I thought it was okay. The part that bugs me the most is that I think it's 21st, not 21th.