Back in time

before we were memories

Back in time

 

I have hurt you so deep

& said those things to you

but I cry my self to sleep

Dreaming of being with you

 

How could I do those things to you?

The only one I want to marry

The only thing I want to tell you

Is how much I am sorry!

 

For me it is really unfortunate

The fact that you walked away

all I want is to be passionate 

& make everything to you okay

 

will you Take my hand again? 

So we can go back in time

To how it was all back then

Because Forgiveness is no crime

 

 

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed.

Reviews

[Eternally Elemental]

Someone already mentioned the usage of 'you', but I noticed the rhyme broke a couple of times too.

Nice portrayal of regret. And a gut wrenching plea that is hard to ignore. That last line had me; 'Because Forgiveness is no crime'.

Amazing delivery of that message. Really something else. Really good :)

[AK]

How could he possibly refuse such an impassioned plea? Only a fool would walk away.

May I suggest... Don't repeat a word too often. Case in point here... the word "you".

[Dillon Cotter]

So powerful and fresh, this write is truly beautiful. The pain and heartbreak is a form of human art that makes memories so pure and quite beautiful. "Because forgiveness is no crime" is a natural amazing line. Great work!!

-Will

[alan khan]

last stanza made it all perfect. very powerful. nice job.