Endless dreams

drifting away in a sea of dreams

Endless dreams

My hopes, wishes & dreams,

All what I want to seize,

All give me strength that leads,

Me through life with ease.

 

Through time I dream & drift away,

Since a lost December, until the next may.

He, she & they are not okay

With any of this & have some things to say.

 

I lean in to the wall feeling cold,

Although not hearing a single word.

Not feeling my hands that they hold,

That is what I long ago had sold.

 

Dreaming inside my own shell,

Living stories I’m unable to tell.

Sleeping and about to kill,

A heart no human should ever sell.

Author's Note

reviews are welcomed

Reviews

[Eternally Elemental]

I'm really confused hahaha, but that isn't your fault. I'm a little lightheaded at the moment so bear with me.

Hmm, the rhymes are maybe 80% working. You probably won't listen to any advice I could give, if any(I know I myself rarely listen). But just letting you know you can practice that with extra attention. I understand where you're going with it though and it is something few people can do(I for one can't). There are other grammatical hiccups which kind of disturb the rhyme as well, like the commas, but like I said, a hiccup.

Now onto the positive! :D
'Since a lost December, until the next may.' I love that! It gives a sense of time, but not just any time... a seasonal time. In Australia that period of time is summer. So I imagine orange skies and warm beach days. A beautiful scene to have endless. Its probably snowing there right now haha
Selling hands and not hearing a single sound. Wow that is a sad picture. Like giving up on physical contact and warmth and any words of encouragement or song.
I had a dream just this last night and I know I couldn't tell it to anyone. Some things are just too sad or terrifying to share. I'm curious about the 'Sleeping and about to kill' line. 'A heart no human should ever sell'... hmm. Leaves me thinking.
Leaves the reader to ponder and contemplate. Is it killing the heart that has betrayed? Maybe killing a heart that they feel they do not deserve? Dreams are crazy. And I imagine they inspire the craziest things.

This was an interesting piece. One of the few things so far that has stumped me, leaving my mind blank and puzzled. Maybe its my light-headedness. Definitely an interesting read and one worth observing. Really liked it :)

[Hello, Goodbye]

really nice... I love art that derives from the notion of dreams..

[cecil]

flowing lines that tell of hope and dreams from one that has lost afew on the way of life but continues to dream on with hope and love,,,Blessings..Cecil

[Dillon Cotter]

interesting write, very smooth and beautiful though. Great job!

-Will

[alan khan]

interesting. great flow, rhyme scheme made it feel restricted almost, but it sill worked. nice work.

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and beautiful. A strong heart and mind can do great things.
Coyote