A thirst needs to be quenched. Words swallowed up are rising. I am sorry I let you go. I am so sorry. I pay for it everyday. I do not have enough courage. I think about you everyday. I cannot hurt anyone anymore and I cannot be hurt anymore. What can I do? The inner tears leak. I become sheer and blue. What should I do?
Nice one....i really did enjoyed..."i become sheer & blue,
what should i do...."....nice line...
the word's in your poem perhaps not too much but your these few word's complete your this poem..........there is so smoothness in your poetric word's....so...deepness's there......i really liked+loved = enjoyed your this poetry totally.....the topic "THIRST" is nice ...i loved your tittle too.........it''s totally perfect with your' thought's........but if you wanna my opinion then i'd say that you should have to continue it (your this poem) with such great deepness...think about my point that you should have to add some more lines.....really there's so depth in it.....& i loved it...may be this is your first writing .....that i've read it out at first time & i really liked your writing & loved your deep thought's ........that's why i'm telling you to continue it..............anyway........i loved it........i wanna give you....89.99/100......have a nice-day.......thank's to share with me....here i've gained some new word's+ nice thought's...........
have a nice day............
may god bless you....!!
I know the feeling of this poem. One of great songs of the seventies. "Should I stay or should I go?" Sometime we lose either way. Life is a test. Can't know pain or pleasure without taking chance. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
This is interesting format. Unusual, but effective in this case........I particularly like the phrasing...."The inner tears leak.".....new way of describing inner pain. I think you have touched on an interesting concept here.... Good job !