Blue stone heart

 

What lies within

this twisted, angry mind?

twisted like hazel

angry like a thunderous night

hatred washing over me

silencing my inner voice

erupting

into more than i can bare

monsterous feelings

taking over my fingers

moving, and controlling my

actions

like a puppet

being made to deliver

the gift.

I push like i am pushing

the whole world

into an unknown place

blood falls

as does the sweet drops of

red wine

my eyes dead

like deep black darkness

no feelings left

empty as my childhood memories.

What lies within

this body

but a blue stone heart.

Reviews

[Delicate Grace]

I like this...it's just abstract enough to let the reader take the words you've written and paint the picture themselves. Very cool.

When i read this...truthfully, it caught me off guard, but when i read it again, I found the underlining beauty of what you've written...not just the words, but the picture that flashes before my eyes when I read it.

Yes it's dark, but who cares?! It's absolutly beautiful in it's own dark and morbid way....the way you see several different pictures that would otherwise be horrifying and made them beautiful.

Great job!

Delicate Grace

=^-^=

[chord0]

Mysterious and imaginative poem. Could be interpreted in the game of horror or ghost related. May also refer to a stone heart with no or little emotion. Great poem
Keep up the good work
chord0

[bluessadmood]

i see here some one with very angry hear ,blurred agitated mind,full of black thoughts,full of hatred,eyes dead like deep black darkness,but you dont say why ,why is all those black thoughts,yes your description is so strong and moving ,yet i sill wonder why...

[Dani California]

This is dark. I completely relate to this, though have found that the only person I was cheating when I became so cold and weary, and felt dead inside, was myself. Without hope, without love, there is truly nothing to look forward to. And as long as we believe that we won't experience love, we won't. Whether we believe we can or we can't, we are correct. No, you didn't ask for a sermon and they can be truly annoying, I know. lol For that I apologize... however, this is what I've learned, in this life. If this is the only life here that we know of... for gods sake... make it great!

I love the depth of this piece and the emotions you draw from your reader (obviously..lol). Flows really well too!

Great job!!!

[Leran Vakem]

Anger, rage and hate are locked in these word. Three of the most powerful emotions someone can feel. I really enjoyed reading this, a real thought provoking piece
Keep it up
Leran Vakem

[Ally Baker]

WOW. its so deep, it has so many emotions in it and is filled with passion, this was a really great write! good job! keep up the good work!

Luhv,
Ashley A

[Angelic Darkness]

This is dark, deep, and has such strong feeling to it.
Sometimes life plays games, and then we grow dead.

AD

[Adela Muresan]

What a wonderful display of human emotion in speech flowers.
I believe many can relate to the inner tempest you penned in it.
Even dough the last line is beautiful, I think that you should of chosen a more interesting word than simply ,,blue,,� maybe ,,turquoise,,. Than again it's just an opinion.

*****Poem.

A.M.

[Lily1111]

Such emotion conveyed here. You have peeled back the layers and allowed the readers a glimpse into the pain and confusion. You held nothing back and I admire that greatly.

[Edmond Dantes]

blue stone heart--ay? nice. i thought it was about giving birth. good job on your free-