Pure pleasure

 

Sit by my side

for just a while

let me listen to your words

like soft lullabys

floating

on the warm evening breeze

share your thoughts with me

let our minds

entwine

like ivy

feel my heart

let the music it plays

feed your soul

with erotic, melodic

tunes

warm your hands on

my feverish urgent

skin

move your fingers across

my trembling body

arched to your touch

watch me

watching you

as you breathe

warm ferocious breaths

we are together

like butterflys

playing in the golden meadows

you touch me

one last time

I am lost

in pure, vivid, uncontrolable

pleasure

 

Reviews

[Windy]

Well done! I love how it starts out so "sweetly" and ends up so passionatly. Good job. ;)

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

This is pure passion with just a hint of sexuality that leaves wonderful thought to the imagination while touching the heart... very beautifully and gracefully penned.

[Vanessa P]

Niiice...Thanks for sharing. I liked it very much. Very sensual. There's really not much to say, the piece spoke for itself. Great job.

[Lily1111]

You are going to laugh at me, but of all the sensuality expressed in the poem, my favorite lines were:

"on the warm evening breeze
share your thoughts with me
let our minds
entwine
like ivy"

There is just something about the way you have woven those words together that really touched me. I thought it was such a lovely expression.

[Janice Ann]

The saying is true we all feel the same...but I truly did enjoy reading this...it is a very sensuously written, enjoyed reading it!

Janice Ann

[Forest Green]

Excellent touch of the sensual in your poem. Well done...a pleasurable read...!

Daniel

[Kees Kapteyn]

I usually really like your writing but i'm afraid this one has too many cliches. It's hard to write erotic poetry because what we all feel from sex and romance is pretty much the same, so the cliches are accurate and indeed sincere and heartfelt. But unfortunately, sincerity alone can't advance the art. Some original imagery and vocabulary can make this poem truly your own.

That said; some lines do indeed touch me such as:

"watch me
watching you
as you breathe
warm ferocious breaths"

Whoa. More stuff like this please- I suddenly can't wait for my wife to come home : )

[Edmond Dantes]

oh, nice job my friend, very poetic & lovely! i like what you did here on these lines , "with erotic, melodic

tunes" & "
let our minds

entwine

like ivy" nice word play, i liked the way it sounded as i read it. thanks for sharing. tlak later.

[Thomas James Martin]

This was so masterfully done! I find it hard to write love poetry that is not overly sentimental or cliche, but this is beautiful and very touching. I really enjoyed it.

Tom

[Ralphy]

Ah, pure pleasure is a work of art. I love the emotion and flow as rhythm makes me sweat�nice write...