Old movies

 

 

Sitting on the platform, of this dirty, rundown station,

i close my eyes and play my old memories inside my head,

I'm older, wiser now with much more patience,

There will be no more tears left to shed.

 

My memories float before me like an old movie,

I smile but my lips do not move,

I open my eyes and the dull smokey air fills my lungs,

I look to the side and see a wonderful image of love.

 

I allow one last teardrop to fall,

A man hands me a clean white tissue,

I wipe the salty droplet and face the wall,

I reapply ruby red lipstick, a touch of fragrance too.

 

The train approaches, the whistle blows,

I rise to my feet, and board onto my new life,

A new chapter a new scene a new show,

Leaving all my memories behind me, no longer a mother or a wife.

Reviews

[Rob Taylor]

I like this. There is a longer story there if you let your mind look deeply into the script this movie was produced from. I can see the ruby red lipstick being slowly, with care applied. A tissue pressed between fresh coated lips to kiss the excess away. The, maybe a raspberry like whisp of aroma, floats it's way along on a slight breeze and others who may be present enjoy the momentary sweetness from a woman refreshing her presense Very good job EMZ.

[Aspiring Angel]

It seems that my visit today within the cafe is leading me to titles I have already read. I hope that you do not mind a second visit and a second review. First of all, once again, I will tell you this is a beautiful write of emtion, feeling and hope. To step into a new chapter of our lives is not an easy thing to do. To put aside pain that the chapter we are closing has left in our hearts is also not as easy as we would hope it to be. Beautiful work sweetie. I am sorry I have not been back sooner but this thing called real life keeps getting in my way. LOL Hugs, Lesa

[Emily B]

I have always loved old movies. The Romantic old black and whites. The haunting melodies. The tragic endings. Good luck with your new scene.

[Jane Doe]

Poignant and haunting, a truly superlative piece. I really, really enjoyed it!

[Last Lying Look]

This was really neat. I loved the images that formed in my head as I read this. I love red lipstick haha :)
You did an excellent job. Great work! :)

[beancountersar]

Simply beautiful.

Very touching, very sad....but a masterpiece.

Nice poem.

[Aspiring Angel]

I love the feeling of moving on in the write, just as the train that you stand waiting to arrive would move ahead. Wonderfully written with the imagery of a young woman who sits and determins to leave all pain behind and move ahead.

Blessings,
Lesa

[Michael X]

You have a beautiful way with subtle emotions and this was powerful
and very well thought out, the depth is intriguing in itself. Wow.

[Sean M. Addams]

wow.... very powerful piece.... ending is really stronger in this .... imagery was great .... all together a very well written story telling poem.... nice job.

[BrightEyes]

wow...this begins in a gray area....then seems to find light in the hope of a new start - only to smack the reader in the heart with the last line: no longer a mother or a wife. What an emotional journey you've created here; great write.

[Thomas James Martin]

Wow! Wha t a vivid picture painted hee. The sadness is so thick you can cut it. It is so realistic; we have all experienced moments like this. Visualizes like a black and white movie, maybe Gene Tierney at a lonely station, with lots of grays and steam, shedding a tear and then bravely going on.

This is excellent, Emma. One of the best poems that I have read here. Mean it.
Tom