Breathe

Inspired by the poems picture sent to me for the "Picture Perfect" contest

Faith in her heart cherished without hesitation

Once warmed the beating muscle so pure

As her serene smile lit up the lives of all who saw.

 

Little girl who endlessly loved so wholly,

Why now do you turn solemnly to the sky

With mourning eyes for the faith once clutched

In an impenetrable nest by thine own small fingers?

 

You tremble beneath far reaching shadows

Of which whisper your name with an icy breath

To lightly brush your goose-bumped flesh.

 

Why does fear now dampen those eyes

That once held infallible courage so strong

As clay lays dried over a smile of love

Hardened into steely mask of sorrow?

 

You look to the clouds with that betrayed eye

Sprouting forth tears unintended for you to weep

Into this life that hath failed to learn

Lessons of countless, secretly told.

 

Will those sorrows ever depart

Returning love unto your breast?

Oh small child how I weep for you

Mourning innocence with utmost grief.

 

How I beg that smile to crack the clay

And survive to brighten one more day.

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Any thoughts coments?

Reviews

[Clarisse Nanoit]

Amazing. You are honestly one of the most talented writers that I've had the privelege of reading on this site--probably honestly the most talented. I love this piece--not a thing I could see wrong with it. Tells a beautiful but sad story. Gorgeous work, Emily.
KH

[ChristianM]

Magnificent poem Emily,
You truly captured my imagination with this piece and for a little while I was in another world.
And then my golden retriever pawed at her bowl and I realized I had forgotten to feed her. She is always reminding me. lol
Great poem.

[Luna Northstar]

I have to say; I absolutely am in love with your writing. Every single word you write is kind, moving, and meaningful. Your writing is full of imagery. The feel, the message, everything is just so.. perfect. This piece feels like it was written from the heart, and it's just beautiful. You can feel her sadness, her feelings that she's been betrayed. I love the forth stanza as well, and the last. Your metaphors, your descriptions, I love this poem. It's one of my favorites. Beautiful write.

[Robin]

such a moving piece , well done

[Tony]

Powerful and moving imagery. You capture betrayal well here. Very moving indeed.

Maksoica

[J.S. Pua]

nice write..
enjoyed this..
good work..

[John Stussy]

Well-written, best of luck for the contest!

[TeenRomance2]

I think it's a beautiful poem.

[Yours Truly]

I like this. I think the title is a good match for it.

[William]

Ah, I really enjoyed this. The words are fantastic. A great read.

[Chilson, Joshua]

Wow, the fourth stanza is just purely amazing and kinda reminds me of some things I try to convey in my work. So many people walk around with a false smile, always trying to keep hidden those very emotions that make us who we are.