Breathe

Inspired by the poems picture sent to me for the "Picture Perfect" contest

Faith in her heart cherished without hesitation

Once warmed the beating muscle so pure

As her serene smile lit up the lives of all who saw.

 

Little girl who endlessly loved so wholly,

Why now do you turn solemnly to the sky

With mourning eyes for the faith once clutched

In an impenetrable nest by thine own small fingers?

 

You tremble beneath far reaching shadows

Of which whisper your name with an icy breath

To lightly brush your goose-bumped flesh.

 

Why does fear now dampen those eyes

That once held infallible courage so strong

As clay lays dried over a smile of love

Hardened into steely mask of sorrow?

 

You look to the clouds with that betrayed eye

Sprouting forth tears unintended for you to weep

Into this life that hath failed to learn

Lessons of countless, secretly told.

 

Will those sorrows ever depart

Returning love unto your breast?

Oh small child how I weep for you

Mourning innocence with utmost grief.

 

How I beg that smile to crack the clay

And survive to brighten one more day.

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Any thoughts coments?

Reviews

[Clarisse Nanoit]

Amazing. You are honestly one of the most talented writers that I've had the privelege of reading on this site--probably honestly the most talented. I love this piece--not a thing I could see wrong with it. Tells a beautiful but sad story. Gorgeous work, Emily.
KH

[FlawedByDesign]

The writing and emotion that this poem provokes, are gray just like the picture it was based on. That's not a bad thing at all, but rather fitting. There is a sadness that comes forth, that makes the reader have compassion for the girl in the picture. It makes you want to jump in and chase away the gray to bring the smile back to that gorgeous face.

Nicely done.

[YokaiShinigami]

Amazing, I can almost hear it in my head like a haunting ballad, that sends chills down my spine. Truly, a work of art.

[larryb]

Your very good missy :)

[Jeff]

What a wonderfully written piece. The flow, and the content is perfect.

[Ry]

I love this.
I love the way it's written.
I love the words used.
I love the subject matter.
Great job =)

[Lyr J. Thirsk]

the way you write comes from some very old, classic, beautiful place

[Just Cat]

Emotional, sad but true and thoughtful piece of writing.
Nice work :)

[Jonathan De Elvira]

good god..a read request...finally...*sigh in relief*..
hurmmmm....I liked the message of this poem...
Because I usually does what she does...just pretend to smile.....
but you know what, nowadays I face with different kind of pretentious..
I had to pretend to be hurt but in real, I don't...I don't feel anything yet I have to wore a mask and looked hurt...

thanks for sharing...

[Matthews Reggie]

emotionally perfect, very true subject, a sad, beautiful poem....

[Walter Scott Morrison]

Very beautiful work. I love the depth of emotion