Rave

 

 

 

 

 

We can walk the streets

Lined with fireworks and techno beats

Light up the night with party flashes

And waves of heat

From dancers passing by

 

The halls align with people

Ready to grab reality and spin

Most unheard souls

Most ones who should never step foot here

Who's parents dont know

 

The DJ spins the disk

And the room explodes in artificial melody

Sweat rolls off the men's face

And the women's legs

 

There's the one

Who stands out

She's a firecracker

Standing in at only five feet tall

 

She grabs the glowsticks and ties them to strings

And creates a personal lightshow

As the speaker burst with the beat

Fast forward, rewind, and scratch the disk

She's moving at an incredible pace

 

Everyone cheers

Everyone can see

The fire in her eyes

Everyone can feel the heat

Of the rave

 

 

Author's Note

Meh.

*This song makes me think of Ed and Jane XD

Reviews

[Veritatis Cupitor]

haha nice!
really enjoyed the image you've clearly painted in words!

this poem is about glowsticks + tecktonik dancing . like seriously. :D
although that song is like what people would dance jumpstyle to -.-

[Alexis]

You had some fantastic imagery going here! Very nice! :3 I'm personally not a fan of parties at all, but this made them sound kind of fun. I like the picture you put with it. Great job!

[nono]

Rave. PARTY! No....no...anyway. Nice job. I like the flow. And you wrapped up the writing very awesome like. I like the imagery you gave. Though raves can be very dangerous.

Yes ur written visuals are amazaing! Loved the ending. It was wrapped up very well!

[Anonymous]

Beautiful imagery! I love raves! XD

[Rae]

I've always wanted to go to a Rave, but sometimes they sound a little... weird? If that's that right word for it. Anyway, very great imagery. It is as if I'm actually there in the Rave. ^^

[Kyla H]

Very good imagery here, I think the music ties it all together. Raves are very interesting, and the way you describe them so vividly, is beautiful. Nicely done!