Reverse Scene Draft (Alfons Heiderich)

I was gonna make this part of Reverse 2 (to add twist) but the love confession just wasn't juicy enough. On top of that, I wanted to portray Alfons as a kind man, and not a demented physco.

The sound of my bedroom door creaking open was what woke me up.

 

 I sat up, rubbed my eyes, and looked at my door to see the murky figure walking into my room. "Alfons?" I called, and he responded. "Oh, you're awake. Good, I was hoping you were," he said softly, sitting on the edge of my bed. I yawned and pushed my blankets to my knees. "You alright? Need anything?" I asked, moving closer to him and sitting with him. Even in the pale, dim moolight, I could see the look in his eyes.

 

"Well...yeah. You've been here a couple months with that other me right? Ed's brother?" he asked, looking over at me with his tired face. I nodded, smoothing my hair to my head with my hands. Alfons sighed and leaned back, looking up at the ceiling. "Well, you've shown me such kindness that I've never ever gotten before. Koda, you..."he began, then he looked away. My eyes widened a little bit, but then I shut them tight and opened them again. "Alfons.....you can tell me anything, y'know that, right? We're friends here. Tell me what's on your mind," I began, lightly touching his back. He sighed louder than the last, looking back at me. "Y'know what's been on my mind? You," he said, and this was where I took my hand away. He continued on:

 

"You've been so good to me, and I can't get you out of my mind. Every waking moment, you're all I can think about. I...I think I...." he began, then he cleared his throat. I shook my head.

 

"Stop right there, Alfons. I think you're a great guy, but I don't....think about you that way," I said, moving myself away by at least an inch. He seemed dissapointed. "I know it. But....I wanted to confess something else to you..." he said as I watched a solemn tear drip from his eye. "I haven't even told Edward, and he's lived with me for two years. But...I'm dying," he said at last, and my mind went blank. "Alfons! Why haven't you told anyone? Why?" I said, grabbing onto his shoulder. Reluctantly, he placed his hand on top of mine. "I didn't want to worry anyone. The truth is, I've been exposed to too much rocket fuel, and it's infected my lungs. I've been coughing blood for a very long time. The doctor says it isn't much longer before I die, and y'know what's sad? I've never loved. Not once. There just hasn't been a special girl that's come," he said, his eyes tearing up as he talked. Then, he let go of my hand. "Then you came along, and all those feelings I thought I was condemned not to feel suddenly took over me. I loved, and I wanted to be loved in return. That's why..." he said, looking at me with such a sad gaze I almost cried too, "...I was hoping you would love me."

 

I froze.

 

"Alfons....listen....you have potential. Alot of it. All you need is to socialize with a girl and you're bound to find her. But, if we're being honest still, then you should know.....my heart belongs to Edward," I said. Suddenly, it was as if poor and dying Alfons wasn't who I was talking to.

 

I was talking to a demon.

 

"Why is that?" he asked, looking down at his lap and clentching his fists. I sighed. "Ed and I have known each other for a long time....since I was 6 to be exact....and I never got over my feelings for him. But Alfons, I really am flattered. Don't get me wrong. It's just--" I began, but then stopped when he glared at me.

 

"Don't kid yourself, Koda. Ed will never...ever...ever....feel for you the way I do."

 

I looked at Alfons, puzzled at why he would say such things. Alfons continued. "He's only going to use you to get back to his home. Then, when you guys are back, he'll forget you ever gave him such graditude. I know he will. I've seen him do it before....using people to get what he wants." Then, he softened his gaze and grabbed my hand. "Now I....I would never. I would love you fiercely until the day my Father calls me home," he said. I blushed, then took my hand away from him. "Go back to bed Alfons. Perhaps some sleep will help you clear your head," I said, patting his back and standing up. Alfons stood up and faced me, his solemn expression easy to see even in the dark. Then, his upset face seemed to brighten, and he got a glint of mischeif in his eyes. "Well, then Koda, let me ask you this: has Edward ever kissed you?"

 

"I'm sorry?"

"Has Edward ever kissed you before?"

"Well, no, but that doesn't mean--"

"Why do you think that is?"

"Well, I dunno. He just doesn't want to, I guess."

"Exactly. If he didn't then, why on Earth do you think he will now?"

"Where are you heading with this, Alfons?"

 

He didn't say anything, only he smoothed a wrinkle in his shirt. I shuddered. "Just go back to bed, okay?" I said, and that's when he acted.

 

He pulled me into him and gave me a kiss.

 

I tried to pull away, but he had a firm grip on me, and so I couldn't move. When he finally let go, I pushed him hard and stood away from him. "See that?" he said, a sloppy smile on his face, "Edward will never do that." I wiped my lips and yawned. "Alfons....listen to me...you can never ever do that again, understand?" I said, my tone sounding that of an angry schoolteacher. Alfons slipped off his coat. "There's no denying it: Edward doesn't love you. So why worry about him when you have me?" he asked. I felt sweat drip down my cheek.

 

He's not thinking about.....no, he can't be......

 

Alfons came and placed his hand on my shoulder. "Let me tell you, you deserve nothing but the best," he said, and then he leaned in to my ear, playing with a few strands of my hair. "I have better experience with women than he does anyway," he whispered flirtaciously. "I thought you said you never had a girlfriend," I asked, my body shaking. "I never have, you're right, but I hang out with girls from the lab all the time, and we get along fine. Do you know where Ed is in all of this? Here, in this house, in his room. He hardly ever leaves. When he does, it's because he either needs to shop for groceries or because I forced him to." Alfons then pressed me against the wall, making sure I had no way of slipping through his grasp. "It's quite obvious Ed isn't looking for love. If he is, he sure has one heck of a way of showing it. Come to me, Koda, and you'll never be lonely again," he said, pushing some of my hair behind my ear. This time, he kissed me again, but not as forced as the first.

 

His talk was beginning to get to me. It was true, I was sure Edward didn't love me in return. But then again, what if he does? He's always been stubborn. But everything Alfons was saying was beginning to have meaning. For a split second, I thought I was falling in love with Alfons. But then it quickly shattered when I remembered everything I stood for.

 

I psuhed Alfons away again. "Listen to me, Alfons. I was trying to be nice with you, but I can't anymore. I will never feel for you," then, for the first time in a long while, I said it aloud.

 

"I'm in love with Ed, and nothing will change that."

 

Alfons smiled again. "Fine then, have it your way. But I will get what I was coming for," he said, and with that, he left my room. I stood there, processing everything he said and did to me. As I turned around to lay back in bed, I heard the door open again. This time, it was Alfons, but with a metal bat in his hand.

 

Is he...going to try and kill me?!

 

"Alfons....what're you doing?" I asked catiously, backing away. He grinned, then lifted the bat. "I'm going to have you....even if it's just for tonight," he said. I was too late to scream.

 

The bat hit the side of my neck, and everything went black.

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When I woke up the next morning, I was in my bed. I sat up, looking around my room.

 

Was it...a dream?

 

The pain on the side of my neck showed me that, no, I really was attacked by Alfons last night. But what had he gotten out of everything just by knocking me out? I stood up, but as soon as I lifted myself, my feet caved from under me and I fell to the floor. "Ow!" I yelped the minute I fell. What had happened? I tried to stand up again, and this time I was succesful. I began looking around my room for anything that he may have left behind...something I could hold onto and use when the time was right. But no, everything was still in it's proper place. There was almost no sign of his having been here. I sat back down on my bed, trying to think things through. Then, it was with a horrible realization that everything seemed to fall into place.

 

The nightgown I was wearing wasn't the one I was wearing last night.

 

The one I had been wearing last night was blue with two laces near the left shoulder. This one was a light beige, with a small bow near the neck. Which only meant that Alfons must have re-dressed me, which also meant that he....I covered my mouth. Had he really? I didn't want to think that he hadn't, but all the obvious signs were showing me otherwise.

 

He had exposed me.

 

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The following months, I couldn't say anything. I stayed mute, only saying normal things, like "Thank you," or "Sure." 

 

Everyday, Al would say something like "Koda, why are you so quiet? What's wrong?" and I would simply smile. But the nagging feeling that I was pregnant tugged at me from time to time, so eventually I took the saved up money I had and made an appointment over the phone when no one was home. I wanted to keep this dark thought a secret, no matter how hard is was. But the day before the appointment, I stayed in my room. Twidling my thumbs, I was worried about what the doctor would say. Was I going to have a baby? I sure hoped not. There was no way I would be prepared for that. Alphonse and I were working hard to try and return to Resembool, but nothing was panning out. We were both getting more thoughts of hopelessness, and it seemed more blunt that that we were going to be stuck in Germany. Still, we tried.

 

Finally, someone knocked on my door, and I looked up.

 

"Come in," I said, and I was surprised to see Ed standing there. "We need to talk. Now," he said. I nodded, and he shut the door behind him. He sat next to me on my bed. "Why have you been so distant these past few months? What's wrong?" he asked, but I didn't say anything. I couldn't. If I did....

 

"Koda, answer me."

 

The way he had said this, I was wondering what he was thinking about. Ed grabbed my hand. "You can tell me anything. We're friends here, remember?" he said, and I remembered when I said this to Alfons. I found that tears were pushing each other out of my eyes, and then I lost it. Letting go of his hand, I covered my eyes and sobbed. Ed placed an arm around my shoulder while I cried. When I finally caught my breath, I spoke. "I was so scared, Ed....so scared. I thought...then...." I said, tears still streaming down my face. "I'll be right back,. Don't move," he said as he left the room. I sobbed more, covering my eyes with my palms and sniffling. When Ed came back, he handed me a glass of water, straightened his collar, and placed his arm around my shoulders again. "Tell me what's wrong," he said. I nodded as I gulped down the water. When I was done drinking, I nodded again.

 

Tell him. He'll help you. You can trust him.

 

"The other night, a few months back, Alfons came into my room. We talked, and he told me....he loved me. But he didn't like it when I told him I didn't feel the same. We argued, and when I thought he was gone, he came back with a metal bat and knocked me out. When I woke up the next morning, I found that I wasn't in the same clothes anymore. Ed....I think he..." I began, then found myself crying a little harder. But he understood what I was trying to say. "He did that? Is that why you've been so quiet?" Ed asked, and I nodded, swallowing some more of the water. "Yes....and I'm scared....I don't know what to do Ed..."I said, crying harder than before. My body was shaking, and I was sniffling. I could see the anger build in Ed's eyes. The perfect golden shade his eyes held were becoming tainted with anger. "That sick monster....I'll never forgive him!" he assured me. "But Ed..." I began, but then he told me to stay quiet. "I'm glad you told me. I'll fix things, I promise you," he said. Then, he pulled something out of his pocket. "Remember this?" he said, and he placed a silver locket in my hands. "Yes," I said before I sniffed, "Yes I do." I fingered the design on the front. He had transmuted this piece of art from a piece of steel. I was there. I was the one who took him shopping to get it in the first place. "Have hope, Koda. I'm with you every step of the way," he said, and I smiled. "Thank you."

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The first thing I noticed the following morning was that Edward was sitting far away from Alfons at the breakfast. Alphonse was sitting there with a puzzled look on his face. "Ah! Morning Koda!" he said when I came down the stairs. I nodded, then sat down. "Sleep okay?" Ed chimed in, and I nodded at that too. I looked out the window, wondering what the doctor would say. Was I pregnant? I sure hoped not. Only time would tell, I suppose.

 

I noticed that Ed's back was turned to Alfons as well. Alfons, who was normally sitting next to Ed just like a college buddy, seemed bothered. "Hey, Ed? What's wrong? You haven't looked at me all morning," he said, but all Ed did was shift in his seat and make a small grunting noise. Alfons looked at me, but I quickly turned away. Al sighed. "Nii-San, you need to answer people when they ask you something," he said stubbornly, but Ed only grunted and looked at me.

 

"You wanna take a walk with me? I need to ask you something," he asked, and I nodded.

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We walked out to the dusty road, and Ed straightened his collar. "Koda...I remembered laying awake last night thinking about what you had said," he said, stopping to fix his shoelace. "Yeah? What about it?" I asked. Ed smiled, then continued walking. "Well, I realized a couple of things while I was laying there. I realized, for one, that I haven't helped out as much as I should. So I'm sorry. I promise to be there more," he said. I smiled. "Aw, Ed, you're there enough. Now what's the other thing?" I asked, and he stopped moving completely. "I um...don't think it's the best thing to talk about right now," he said, but I was curious. "Oh, Ed, tell me! Please! I won't be able to take the suspension!" I said, and I clung onto his arm playfully. He laughed a little. "Hey, cut that out. Like I said, it's not the best thing to talk about. I might hurt you more if I said it," he answered, holding onto my hand. I liked the way his hand linked with mine. In fact, I loved it.

 

"Um, Ed....the reason Alfons got upset was because I told him--" I said, then gasped. "What?" he asked. I shook my head. "It's nothing. Anyway, I need to go back and get something. I have somewhere to be," I said, turning around. "Why end our walk so early?" he asked behind me. I pressed a palm against my stomach. "I have a place to be, Ed. Like I said," I answered back, spooning him some of the suspension he'd shoved down my throat earlier. He placed his hands cooly into his pockets.

 

 "Where ya' going? Want me to accompany you?" he asked, looking straight into my eyes. My heart skipped a beat. His eyes seemed to be looking right into my soul. "Oh...well, I'm just going out. I need some time to think," I lied, hoping he wouldn't ask for more details. But he knew I was nervous about his asking. "Why aren't you telling me the truth?" he asked so smoothly I felt like my knees were caving. "I just...can't, Ed. If I did..." I began. "We've been friends for a long time, Koda. Hey, if you tell me, then I'll tell you what I thought about last night," he negotated. I thought it over.

 

Equivalent Exchange, I guess.

 

"Well....I got an appointment with the doctor. I want to know if...I'm gonna have a baby," I said, scratching my arm. Ed gasped. "Really? Well, then, let me come with you!" he said with that angelic smile of his that melted my core every time. But this time, I deflected the screaming of my heart. "Sorry, Ed. I have to do this alone--" I began before he grabbed my hand and squeezed hard. "You don't have to be alone! Let me help you!" he cried. Then, with his free hand, he pulled out the locket from his pocket. "We're never seperated. So let's not start now, okay? Please?" he asked, placing the locket in my fist. I nodded. Ed smiled. "Good. Koda..." he said, then stopped. I fingered the locket with my fingers, resisting the urge to look up and place my hand on his face.

 

But he did this for me.

 

His hand cupped my cheek easily. "I don't wanna hide anything from you. Let me tell you what I realized last night," he said as he took his hand off my face. "I...I realized that you have a special place in my heart. But I didn't want to say anything in case you felt like I was doing something...wrong," he said, then looked away. Was I hearing right? Did Ed just say that he loved me? I gripped his hand tight, and then looked at his face. "You're not doing anything wrong. All you are doing is following your heart. Like I should have years ago," I said, then I handed him back the locket. "Ed...thank you. I don't get mad when you say it," I said, then turned around and walked back to the house. But then he grabbed me. "Koda, listen to me. Do you love me?" he asked, and his eyes shrone. I didn't know how to react to this. "Ed..." I began, but then he shook his head. "Do you love me?" he asked one more time, "Be honest."

This was when I began to cry. "Koda..." he said, then loostened his grip. I wiped my eyes. "Yes, Edward....yes, I love you," I spoke almost too softly. Ed smiled. "Good. Then let me stay with you. I want to make sure you don't feel left alone."

 

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"Negative," the doctor said as he slapped my test results on the table. I smiled so wide that I was sure the doctor thought I was crazy. "So...I'm not gonna have a baby? Awesome!" I screetched. Ed embraced me in a hug. "See? I told you everything was gonna be okay," he said as he stroked my hair. I sniffled, happy that everything worked out. "If you still have doubts, come back in a month," he said as he passed me the bill. I signed it, and handed over the money. "Now to go home," I said. As I left the room, Ed followed.

 

Negative! Negative!

 

"Good for you," Ed said as he placed a hand on my shoulder. I leaned my head against his chest. "Wonder what happened....maybe he didn't do what we're accusing him of," I said. Ed shook his head. "Why else would you be in different clothing?" he asked angrily. I shrugged. The evidence was against Alfons, no doubt. There was nothing I had that deemed him innocent. Then I sighed. "We have to focus. Getting back home to Resembool is our main concern," I said, standing up straight and looking out into the sky. "There has to be some scripture I'm overlooking," I said outloud. Perhaps saying it outloud made me hope that I'd find the answer.

 

But nothing came.

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"What do you think, Al?" I asked once Al and I were in our study area. He shrugged. "It just may work. What do you think, Koda?" he asked, placing his hands on top of the work papers. "I think it has a shot. So let's try it," I added. But just before we were about to begin, we both heard a loud noise that sounded like someone fell coming from the dining room. "I'll go check it out," Al said, then he left the room in a haste. I stayed still, wondering what was going on. "Nii-San!" I heard from the dining room. Finally, my curiosity took over my body and I ran to the dining room.

 

What I saw was surprising.

 

Al was standing back, in shock. I looked at the wall, and saw Ed holding Alfons against the wall by his collar. "I can't take it anymore! I've tried holding it in!" Ed screamed. "What--what's wrong with you, Ed?! Put me down!!" Alfons screamed, but Ed only slammed him against the wall again. "You have no right to talk!" he said. I clung onto Ed's arm. "Ed! What're you doing?" I asked, but then I knew.

 

He was protecting me.

 

Alfons tried pushing Ed's hand away, but Ed remained firm. "I'm saying I don't answer to rapists, Alfons, you got that?" he spat, and Alfons gasped. "Rapist? Nii-San, I don't think--" Al began, but then Alfons' face changed. "You told him?!" he yelled at me, and Ed pushed him harder. "Yes, she did. What're you gonna do about it!?" Ed screamed at him. Alfons simply hung there, no longer fighting back. Instead, he was laughing to himself. When he lifted his head again, the look was so horrifying I yelped. "It was worth this, that's for sure!" he said. I shook my head in disgust. "You're lucky she's negative," Ed said, and with that he picked him up off the wall and threw him to the floor. Alfons only laughed harder. "Why do you care? It's not like you heard her crying!" Alfons said, and Ed seemed to hesitate. Al looked at me. "What happened?" he asked, and I shook my head. That was when Ed kicked Alfons so hard he skid across the floor. "You scum," Ed choked under his breath. I could see Alfons' nose was bleeding. "I want you dead," Ed added as he picked Alfons up by the collar again. But none of this seemed to effect Alfons in any way. "Beat me up all you want, you still won't change the fact that it happened. Is that what you're trying to do? Of course, when you try and fix things..." Alfons said as he pat Ed's AutoMail arm, "...nothing goes right, now does it?"

 

Ed couldn't take any of this anymore. With a look of anger that I had never seen before, he shouted and threw Alfons out the window. The glass shattered so loud that I had to cover my ears. Ed only stared out the window, looking longingly at Alfons struggling to stand on his feet. "Leave my past out of this," Ed simply said. Then, he looked over at me. "Have you found a way home yet?" he asked, and I watched a solitary tear slide down his what looked like pale face.

Author's Note

REASONS WHY I TRASHED THIS:

1) I wanted to portray Alfons as a saving grace, not as a future Michael Jackson.

2) Alfons didn't know about the Human Transmutation, so how would he be able to debunk the theory behind Ed's arm?

3) Ed wasn't carrying the locket on his person at the end of Reverse 1, so how does he magically have it now?

4) THEY DIDNT KISS!!!1!!

5) While I liked the idea of Ed sticking up to protect Koda, the way I wrote it just wasn't working for me.

6) Why is Koda explaining the creation of the locket?? WE ALL KNOW, MORON!

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[Keevan]

"Alfons, you scum!"

I kept screaming that at the computer lol