I liked the strong ending. Seeking weakness in someone we care about. Is never right. You made your point in the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
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Some people seem to take delight in being brutal with words. Skin-deep beauty is no real beauty at all. Some of the world's so-called great beauties are empty vessels, with cosmetically enhanced exteriors and rotten interiors! Harsh words sting, but we have to move on. A man like the one in your poem isn't worth grieving over. A sad, but poetic write.
Surely he is dust now after coming to that conclusion. Isn't it a pity that the words we wished we'd said, come later with reflection. How slow he was. Very nicely composed. Pleased to meet you Emunah June.
Sadly, it is often only later that we think of what we wish we had said. Actually, though, it is probably better if nothing was said. Better to just let him go and forget him.
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You are absolutely right, and healing is a process that takes time. Thank you.. read moreHello!
You are absolutely right, and healing is a process that takes time. Thank you for taking time out of your day to read my writing. Truly means a lot.
This deeply profound. I loved it. You exploring Faith. Your beliefs that you believe in. Its like air. You can feel but can’t see it. Yet it’s vitally important, to exist. Nicely done.
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That is not the message I was going for, BUT, I see where it might have subconsc.. read moreHi!
That is not the message I was going for, BUT, I see where it might have subconsciously come into play! I’m thankful you enjoyed it, thank you so so much!
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Oh Im so sorry, if I misinterpreted your poem. I had a sense there was a macabre energy in the endin.. read moreOh Im so sorry, if I misinterpreted your poem. I had a sense there was a macabre energy in the ending. However, I felt strength from this piece. Nevertheless, your poem had realness to it.
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