Nails on a Rain Tarp [A Terrifying Thought]

It's hard to sleep

On a night so fair

When wind chills my bones

And spiders crawl in my hair

 

The light grows dim

Batteries near dead

Slipping headphones on my ears

And a pillow under my head

 

That battery dies too

And suddenly stops my heart

When demons float around outside

Spitting nails on our rain tarp

 

I had cried in the car the night before

And tonight the acid is over

The lightning flash and streaks outside

Skies dark with rolling thunder

 

The nails are ripping throught my chest

My music a distant memory

So tonight I'll sleep under plastic sheets

And dream of dreams in ebony

 

And as I shiver and shake under the hoodies

And my night is filled with horror and wraught

I finally come to the obivous conclusion

That camping in the rain is a terrifying thought

Author's Note

Seriously. Thunder, lightning, and everything. It was scary.

Reviews

[Rae]

I like how you compared the rain to demons spitting nails. It makes me think of how children interpret things like that. Spiders crawling through your hair? Gross. I'd really hate camping if that ever happened. Actually, I've never went camping before, unless you count camping in a tent in my garage camping, which doesn't count at all. That would be scary though, being out in the rain in only a tent with thunder the only sound you could hear and lighting all around you. If it were me, I'd be crying too, but then I'd be called a baby by my dad and then we'd insult each other a bit and then I'd be okay after that. ^^" Anyway, this poem had great, great, GREAT imagery and detail. When you say "plastic sheets" you mean "sleeping bags" right? That's the only thing I can think of. ^^" Superb poem and I WILL read more from you since that's all I've been doing all day. ^^" Keep on writing please! :D

[Emunah June.]

No, we legit slept under plastic sheets and hoodies because Mom forgot her blanket so it was cold xD And so on the second night she took the blanket since we got it the night before so we used hoodies as blankets. And the plastic sheets were because the rain was leaking through the tent, so Dad covered us up so we wouldnt get wet.

[Rae]

Oh my dear. Camping sounds very inviting now. XD

[Emunah June.]

LOL but dont worry! We're going camping again this weekend but we rented out a cabin xDDDD

[kublakhan27]

This is the first piece of yours I've read, and I really like it...it's so vivid, with the overall tone and the imagery you use to convey it coming together seamlessly :)

[Emunah June.]

Well thank you! *huggle* :D

[kublakhan27]

You're very welcome :D

[SmileBig :)]

I friggin love this so much! The imagery is amazing, and it's a little on the creepy side, which is awesome. AMAZING POEM WELL DONE!

[Emunah June.]

Thank you that means so much to me!