CASTLED

My heart beats like a one woman army placing ahead, what my mind begs to leave behind...

Casually Drifting in Conflicted Direction, she pushes on
Delivering fake smiles to those who Can’t see and Dismissing the Concerned Chatters of-
“her Demeanor has Changed.” and “the Compassion in her eyes has Disappeared.”
Closed-fisted and with Caution she Coasts through the Disturbed Chambers within her Contour
facing the Disputes that has Defeated her mind and Congested her Chest with Charmed Devotions
Captivated… she tells herself, never again…
Desired Dreams are only Conceived to be Conquered by Distance and Denying’s
Cherished Confidence in a Caress is only a feeling made to Diminish in Despair
Chasing beliefs and fighting for a Common love when odds are against you Can’t be won

Castled-
numb-
Convincing only goes so far when heart Dominates over mind
let go was the Demand... but letting go is the Dilemma

Author's Note

Yup.... yall are bout to hear my tears... sorry its the only place I can do it...

Reviews

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Wow...what a stylistic approach this is....just perfect....
such a pleasure to read...words like desired, cherised, captivaated....
adds so much strength to the poem :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

You show Honesty in this... Emotions can be a powerful thing, and the pen is your tool to release what consumes you. I believe your talent shines through as you become the amazing writer we know you to be. LOVE THIS! Excellent write!

[Revery]

Oh how we are all like ice burgs where all the passion and pain remains below the surface unseen. Glad you can come hear and be real, you are loved and adored here so go ahead and write baby write. This is good, purge it all to ink and cast it in the wind. Emphasis, this world of wc is better with you here.

[Allen Smuckler]

This was a wonderfully delicious creative piece...Not only was the message distinct and clear but the style and form were excellent.
I enjoyed this dissertation completely
Great write Emphasis
allen

[Amila Jay]

let go was the Demand... but letting go is the Dilemma

A very nice poem, and hey shedding a few tears will hurt a little but it only makes you stronger in a sense. :-)

[Thea]

Aw... :(((
Crying is just normal because it's a way of letting go our fears and sorrows.
This is an amazing piece...I like word choice...I noticed that there are so many "C's" and "D's' yet they were used well...
Great work...
:)))

[EMF]

Cry away Kid. Shoulder dry. Smoke in mouth. Black in cup. And despite the tears one stunning work. Not only deeply emotional, but with such tehnical skill I'm awed. Totaly breathless. But that could be smoking 20 a day on top of work like this

[BlueDreams]

Very longs terms used here which seems more intriguing.. Great write :-)

[Arielle Ann]

this was an amazing piece sis...to start with it has that repeated weightage to c's and d's...still keeping it mind this usage you managed to bring out the message very clear...to keep track of vocabulary vs emotions is not easy; but you have proven that wrong...wonderful really!

[WhiteWillow]

Amazing use of "C" and "D" words, flowing perfection!