who's wrong ?

is something wrong
with the way I talk
the way I walk
the way I stair
the way I write
is something wrong with me?
is something rong
with the way I feel
the way I deal
the way I sob
the way I smile
is some thing wrong with you?
the way you talk
the way you walk
the way you stair
the way you write
is some thing wrong with you
the way you judge
the way you feel
the way you act
the way you look

witch one of us is wrong or are we both wrong in are appearance
and are behaveyer if both of us is wrong then witch one is wright
because someone has to get us out of this mess

Author's Note

I am very confused some one has to be the one who screwed up and someone needs to fix it

Reviews

[chaotic katie]

lines four and fifteen- stare, line- wrong, lines twelve and seventeen- something, line 23 -behavior, which, and right. I wouldn't stress the grammatical errors too much, you'll get better as time goes on and you write more and more, trust me, I did. :)

[unbrakable fragile girl]

thank you I will make the changes

[chaotic katie]

anytime. Also I love the emotion you put into this. Guess that's one of the perks of being a venting poet.

[unbrakable fragile girl]

ya it is if you can put the emotion in it thank you very much

[chaotic katie]

anytime :)

[unbrakable fragile gir..]

thank you sooo much I'm glad you think that way about my writing when I wrote it i wasnt shur how people would understand it or like it soo thank you very much

[C.E.K. Nelson]

This poem's simplicity and straightfordness is what makes it genious ! Speaking of judgement and segregation, asking the reader questions, gets the reader involved and thinking about the issue. At first the typos bothered me but on ther otherhand, there is a rawness to this style of edit free words that is very appealing! Great job! Thanks for sharing.