pain

my pain has everything to do with you
you don't understand do you?
the blood I bleed
the feeling of nothing
the sour lonely unshakable feeling
My heart beats but I'm not living
my anger and rage tords you and everyone
it hurts so much it dosent
I can't remember when I was happy
ever since I was a child I have lived with this
it's you who broke me
I cant love
can't care
can't be some one because of

YOU
that's what causes my pain that isn't pain anymore it's despair iv lived with it for so long I don't feel when I should feel pain

Reviews

[chaotic katie]

line seven- towards,and last line i've. Other than that, perfect. Very relatable. it has that added punch of emotion which grabs the reader and makes them feel. Nice job!

[unbrakable fragile girl]

wow thank you

[chaotic katie]

anytime! :)

[unbrakable fragile gir..]

Ya I do I know all of your problems and who causes them not naming any names Sarah hhhum

[Lexi]

well your gonna love me cuz i definetly relate to this, and you know who my problem is!

[unbrakable fragile gir..]

thank you I love when people can relate to my pieces

[NA]

I can relate to this write..very well penned!

[unbrakable fragile gir..]

thank you it means a lot to me

[Troy Henson]

A raw emotional piece. Quite direct in its context and the tone remained the same throughout. The flow was also very good and a point was made clear.
Great work.
Regards