chained

why are you trying to control me I did nothing to you this is me your suffocating you've chaining me to a wall arms and feet choking me any second I could die why are you doing this every second is torcher kill me if your ganna I can't breath and I never will stop keeping me so tight I need to be loose because you and me both know it's not going to work I'm me that girl the one who can be broken but these chains can be I will I don't care just like you said you can't brake me not if you have me living at one second every day or chain me up or kill me it's not going to work but do it for the hell of it why not watch me dance

Reviews

[chaotic katie]

first line- chained,second line- torture, gonna, and breathe, line four- break. Other than those editing poins i see nothing wrong. I like how desperation clashes with determination in this piece. Nicely written!

[unbrakable fragile girl]

thank you very much

[chaotic katie]

anytime!

[unbrakable fragile gir..]

thank you I wanted it to have a strong emotion effect

[C.E.K. Nelson]

Wow- jam packed with emotion, I can feel it!!! Beautiful!