walking

walking

A Poem by Abbie

I walk on the beach

next to you

your my dad

 

But do you care

it seems that any

thing i do is

wrong with a capital W

 

I'm not perfect

never will be

never ever

but dad i love you ♥

 

Is that why

you never call

we never talk

and 

I'M PROUD THAT YOU MY FATHER

 

© 2011 Abbie


Author's Note

Abbie
This ones for my dad.i wonder if he really does love me but im still proud that he's my dad please review any grammar or any thing just say and i'll fix it. thx ♥♥♥

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This is such a heartfelt poem and a bit sad. Your true personality shines through and your father should be proud of you.

Posted 13 Years Ago


awww its so cute

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is very sweet! I love that you love your dad....

But this is so sad as well for obvious reasons. :0(

Posted 13 Years Ago


I like how this poem escalated.

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is very sweet

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very good. Again, makes the reader think. I can almost relate. Again, very good at making something short become something large.

Grammer-

Last line should be- I'M PROUD THAT YOU ARE MY FATHER

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is beautiful lol

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is really beautiful:)

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on February 18, 2011
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Author

Abbie
Abbie

taco bell, NM



About
my name is Abbie, i love 2 write poetry,but i am mostly nice anything you want to know ask more..

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emptiness emptiness

A Poem by Abbie