True Love

True Love

A Poem by Abbie

You were my world

My everything

I gave you my heart,You it broke

I knew I would end in disaster and it did

You wrote letters,

You used to say how I was your Baby Girl.

And say how you would never let me go,

 Now I think about you everyday

and I still love you

and I think you might love me too

I might just get a second chance

At my one true love

 

I love you Always and Forever

© 2011 Abbie


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Abbie
Any mistakes ? please review thx

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aww this is romantic great write!

Posted 13 Years Ago


A couple of small mistakes, no biggie though...
on the 4th line, I believe you were saying "I knew IT would end this way" IT instead of I, and on the 7th line, remove the "and" , Keeps your rhythm consistant and doesn't mess your meaning up..... Great poem and a Wonderful write. I hope this was helpful

Posted 13 Years Ago


Fix third line
The line after that would sound better
if you said" I knew it would end in a disaster and surely
It did" also the line "and I still love you" instead of "and"
I would replace it with "for"
I over all felt you where honest and sincere
when writing this so I cant really judge your feelings.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on February 8, 2011
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Tags: LOVE, SAD, BROKEN HEARTED, BARNEY ELMO, BIG BIRD, WINNE THE POOH, PIGLET, TIGGER, MR OWL, YOUR MOM

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Abbie
Abbie

taco bell, NM



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