True Love

True Love

A Poem by Abbie

You were my world

My everything

I gave you my heart,You it broke

I knew I would end in disaster and it did

You wrote letters,

You used to say how I was your Baby Girl.

And say how you would never let me go,

 Now I think about you everyday

and I still love you

and I think you might love me too

I might just get a second chance

At my one true love

 

I love you Always and Forever

© 2011 Abbie


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Abbie
Any mistakes ? please review thx

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From what I've read of your work, one thing always stands out--your big heart! A lost love is inevitable in life. It takes time to get over, but love will always be in our future. Good poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Sometimes we must admit to ourselves that love just isn't meant to be, no matter how perfect it may seem at that certain point in time. Love can either make you or break you...and a lot of hearts get broken due to stupidity and bad choices. But your heart being broken is never your fault, but it's always good to feel as if you still love that person who broke it...it's normal, so don't feel bad about it. We often feel that it's better to be ignored or our hearts broken instead of knowing or seeming as if that person doesn't care. It takes two to make love work in full effect.

Posted 13 Years Ago


"I knew I would end in disaster and it did" shouldn't it be I knew IT not I knew I? good poem

Posted 13 Years Ago


Nice!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very good again lol. I'm sure you're tired of seeing this but it's true. Keep up the good work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


my b :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


I liked it
besides grammar
there are NO mistakes in poetry not even one mistake myself cant make a mistake9besides grammar) becuz poetry is worded how the artist likes :D
true luv im in it i hope he doesnt brea my heart:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very melancholy: sadness with a hint of hope mixed in. I'm not sure how I feel about the color scheme though, looking at the words and colors all being part of the same piece of art, they seem too colorful and happy to fit the mood. I would consider using darker colors for the sadder parts, bold colors for the passionate parts, and bright colors for the hopeful parts, that's just me though. As for the writing itself, it seems very personal, so not to be cruel if these were based on actual events, but the "baby girl" part seems kind of adolescent and takes away some of the power of the piece because it seems more the end of a teen crush, and not really the devastating end of a more serious relationship. Again, that's just me.

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is about him if it is he said the same thing to me

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very sweet poem. from the heart.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Added on February 8, 2011
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Abbie
Abbie

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