why

why do we cry

when were all alone

why do people die

every day

why does the sun rise

every morning

why does every day

seem like a life time

why are there gangs

and wars

why why why why??????

do we sleep and cry

Reviews

[No_One_Special]

Interesting short piece, given it's length and even how it's all in lowercase, somehow to me it makes me think of a little girl standing over a grave and whispering these questions. It's very innocent in it's perspective and truly does seem how like a child who is still getting used to the world would look at things. The things you listed all arguably seem like bad or annoying things and it feels like, "If they're bad, why do they exist?" which I think is something we all struggle with.

[OT]

nice poem!! why do we cry indeed - why not perhaps?

[Vital Signs 13]

This is stunning in a total subtle way.

[Coyote Poetry]

The why's of life leave us wondering why the world had gone mad. I understand this poem. A very good ending to a excellent poem with many questions needed to be answered.
Coyote

[Another Relic]

Life holds more questions then we can handle leaving us confused and looking for someone to give us the answers, but there are just as many of those too. The question then becomes, which one is right. The cycle continues. Good one.

[Short.Nerd]

NIce!

[Chelsea]

A lovely poem. I know, as a teenager, I always have so many questions about the world. I'm always wondering.... But I really think that's the challenge of life. Seeking answers to your questions. This poem clearly states that message!
A suggestion. Maybe break it into verses....

why do we cry
when were all alone

why do people die
every day

why does the sun rise
every morning

why does every day
seem like a life time

why are there gangs
and wars

why why why why??????
do we sleep and cry

I'm not sure, but I feel that it should be broken into stanzas. But it's fine as is, don't feel obligated to use that change!
A great write---- and keep looking you'll find the answers!
:)

[Jonathan]

This write is alright, I feel you could have
Really rocked this poem if you dug deeper in
Your line of questioning. For ex. Why do we
Sleep in a house and eat when, and what we want to eat
Why are their people that sleep under a piece of metal and
Eat once a week. Questions that hit hard and tug at the heart
Strings. By the way "were" in the 2nd line should be "we're" or "we are"

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

hee hee hee I reviewed this one already :P

[Steph's_romantic_myster..]

The hard questions of life-en-vearse... Great expression of words and a Really remarkable write. your tempo and rhythm flows consistantly and Although I normally dont like Sporattic rhymes, this one fits it perfectly a 100/100 and a favorite for my library.