sands of time

Another year has gone and past
the sands of time moved so fast
our time together may not last

for a rift in time is opening up
to end out meeting so abrupt
it wasn't in vain the time spent together
for the memory will stay with us forever

Reviews

[Falling Leaf.]

This is great, so great. Short, but packed with heartbreak. The only error I find is in "out time together may not last" I think you meant our. Anyway, the emotion behind it...the message (relinquish the memories you make with your past loves) is all so great.

I'll be honest, there's nothing unqiue to make this poem stand out among others of its type, but it was still good. A very good, but very typical, lost love story. I hope this doesn't come off as harsh to you. I believe in sharing my honest opinion. It truly was good, just not outstanding.

Thank you for sharing, anyhow!

Savannah

[Xen enderide]

i don't really mind. i just write how i feel during a certain time and i just post it here it it will not be lost

[Falling Leaf.]

Ahhh I see. It's good to hear that you can receive honest critisism, my friend. Some can't handle it...

[Xen enderide]

everyone is entitled their own opinion and to voice it out. as a human living in this world we cannot expect to live through it without judgment every now and then.

[Falling Leaf.]

Agreed, Xen.