Abandoned

It bothered me how some things
Would get lost in my mind

Thinking of how much i used to do
And how some was left behind

Things that used to be in my life
Were eventually pushed aside

How i long for those few things
 Couldn't find them, but i tried

Reviews

[Seshat Nidaba]

The concept of your video poem was amazing! I really appreciated it and found it quite artistic! However, I would do two simple things to improve it. I'd zoom in more to the writing when you show it on paper (sometimes I couldn't read it) and I'd shorten the entire clip by half.

As for this piece right here. The pleasant nostalgia says a lot by saying little, very cyclic. Your relationship to time is improving, I can sense a certain peace in how you process your past. The past is pre-set to grief, while the future is pre-ordained to joy. We can surely influence how much we think about either.