Broken Annotations

Her mind is the motive 

and her thoughts are the knife 

For her heart is a whirlwind

And the silence, her life

The sounds just keep going...

                                                             down

                                                                            

                                                                                    down

                                                                                            

                                                                                                                  down.

The voices keep screaming going 

                                                    

now

now 

now.

Her words are the evil 

and her distance the good 

They want to understand 

but they never can 

And she wants to tell them 

But not like she planned

Because all of this is just a curse 

Because explaining herself 

will make everything worse 

And she loves them but her mind is still reeling 

Her thoughts are still screaming 

her heart is still feeling 

So her distance does the saving 

because  her mind is misbehaving 

And he asks her whats wrong 

And they ask where she's gone 

And she cant lift the cage 

or start over, reverse 

Because explaining herself 

will only make everything worse

       

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Ti]

This is a very powerful and creative poem, which pulls in the readers, its as if this character is fighting inside of her head and is going to loose control one day, its really remarkable what you've done here Emma.
Keep writing like this, and I'm sure you'll be a great writer :)

[Emma Marie Taylor]

Thank you so much!!! I wanted to create a character with an overactive mind, with the inability to communicate to the people around them because of the chaos going on inside their mind. I'm so glad you liked it!

[Ti]

Sounds very complicated indeed. Yes, I really enjoyed reading it, great write. :)