The second stanza was my favorite part. It gave a really good chilling feeling. Over all, I thought the piece was really well put together. It clearly brought across the feeling of being opressed by some force, be it a person or an event or emotion. Or monster for that matter. Either way, the feeling of abuse come through and the mental anguish involved. Well penned!
Very beautiful. It saddens me to know that so many people have been affected by this evil he has used but unfortunately more times than not the victim goes unheard or the cries for help go unspoken. Thanks for sharing such an intense and honest poem.
"No one will listen
No one can see
The evil he has used inside of me"
Beautiful! I think this is how a lot of victimless feel.. Hopeless and forgotten, like no one cares. Very powerful write.
"I wake up screaming
Tears steam down my face"
In that part of the first stanza, I believe you meant stream instead of steam.
Once again, beautiful poem (:
This is very powerful and not to mention heartbreaking. :(
Amazing work! :)
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
Thank you! I originally wrote this poem awhile ago, when I was experiencing very strong feelings aft.. read moreThank you! I originally wrote this poem awhile ago, when I was experiencing very strong feelings after a powerful dream I had, but recently I decided to update it and fix the rhymes, because it didnt blend like I wanted it too. But thank you! Glad you liked it!
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