HAIR, the new prompt for Vol's Group, Ravin' Ink

as above: using the prompt the core of poem or prose poem emmajoygreen, UK, Thursday, 31/10/2024

Born ten minutes apart

 a she, a he, a pair -

Both less than seven pounds,

 long limbed, hair wavy fair

She, named Delilah, was 

 this twosome's leading light

Sam, her bro, was darker,

 and e'en more so at night

As babies didn't really know

 the right way from its wrong

But one could scrawl musica,

the other sing a song

Yet as they grew older their

 hair longer did shoulders go,

nicely warm an' snug when

 the weather turned to snow

Aware modern styles, the

 sister's head was shorn near

bald but Sam's stayed nicely 

 warm whilst  Lila's ever cold

Time passed by an' Sam's

 hair was daily much admired

but his twin became envious

 her mood an' less desired 

One night in a fever, she

 took sheers to cut his locks

but - forgot to remember that

 had gone back the tic a tocs

He was out with his buddies

 to sample pints of  beer

so zig-zagged his way home 

 hilarious with cheer

Upstairs he crept to find a truly

 sorry sight, his teddy bears had

been shorn of hair coz sis had 

sleepwalked through the night! 

Author's Note

and no, I know, I know, rhyme is not exactly my metier! I did m' best!

Reviews

[Marie]

I simply LOVE this wonderfully inked story of the twins Samson & Delilah, the differences between them (apart from the obvious) and the delightful twist at the end of the story was nothing short of brilliant, a very masterful write, Emma. Thank you so very much for sharing. I so enjoyed reading...

[emmajoygreen]

Amid the dark and dangerous, even tho' never putting head in sand. we have to arm ourselves with smiles to live on.. surely? Thank YOU for your ever understanding friendship.

[Marie]

I so agree, dear Emma. Wishing you a very lovely, relaxed and pleasant evening to enjoy...

[Ern M. Yoshimoto]

okay, i secretly wished it rhymed throughout, but the narrative of this poem had won me over. it is such a interesting multi-layered study of a relationship between siblings. there's love, there's jealousy, there's a lot of things. and the rhythm added a whole new layer -- it brings melody, suggesting that despite all their difficulties the pair still stand by each other, or at least dance arund each other when necessary.

[emmajoygreen]

I'm more of a story teller than poet, hence I write prose poetry. But, will try more metered work in the New Year! Not saying which year however! mngwill try to rh

[Aarti Sriram]

That was a fun write ! How your imagination flowed from just a prompt hair, wonderful @emmajoygreen ...evoked mixed feelings especially at the end. Thinking of angry twin sister and humorous bear scene wt furs chopped. Usually people drink to let their hair down but for the twin bro he got to keep up his hair hehe enjoyed !

[emmajoygreen]

I belong to a Group and every so often we are asked to use a prompt in what we write. The latest was HAIR! Thank you very much

[Samuel Dickens]

Poor, poor Sam. Now he must sleep with bald teddies! Oh, what a cruel, sleep walking sister. Are you sure this isn't taken from some ancient Greek myth? A fun read, my friend.

[emmajoygreen]

' Are you sure this isn't taken from some ancient Greek myth? ' But of course, Samuel, you know what a highly eddyucated woman what I is!!!! Glad you enjoyedm dear friend. Many thanks for you time and kindness - as always. Happy w/e!

[emmajoygreen]

forgive the typos intended and otherwise, please

[LisaCarol]

Very clever. I especially liked the humor at the end of the poem. Please keep writing and sharing.

[emmajoygreen]

Lisa Carol, novel writer and new friend.. many thanks for your kind review! It's good to share - especially a laugh or giggle or few! I am more a story writer than poet! Happy to keep writing, using words and - sharing! Happy weekend. :)

[Anya Stork]

I can picture this! Twins make a fascinating topic, don’t they? They can also be rivals. Another great tribute to the theme of hair—thank you!

[emmajoygreen]

Thank you so very, very much, Anya. My write came from the heart and a prompt of/from the Group: Ravin' Ink!

[emmajoygreen]

Vol... Many thanks for being in happy and charming charge of the Site.
You have a lot of things going on in your life.. so, again: THANK YOU.
Making use of your prompts is great fun and can be done in one's spare times
without being hustled or pushed.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Wow the sleeping giant great play on words and history a matter of facts in the end.we all come together in this case bro against sis how can a bear.live without hair he must sleep as she sleep.walks.
Thank you for sharing.

[emmajoygreen]

Thank you so very much, Mauricio - as ever you've left such generous words! Wishing you well, wherever you are!

[Mauricio Montoya]

Thank you for sharing. Everything is fine.

[Jeyanthi]

Ah, he didn't lock the door...
The teddy bear with no fur,
Comes back for dailah.
Be aware, of the bear
look alike a man
at night walking...

Fun story... and the twisty right and wrong... recognized at last...

(Sleeping Bear do exactly like one)

[emmajoygreen]

Jayanthi (such a lovely name), many thanks for reading my fun words about brother, sister and their hair! Wishing you smiles.. ..

[Jeyanthi]

🙂🙂🙂🙂🙂
Welcome 🙏

[emmajoygreen]

Big smile.

[Lorry]

And all that from a prompt of hair? I've just been telling myself minimalism is back in fashion, as mine was only five lines long, but maybe length of piece coincides with actual length of hair. What do you think Rapunzel? 😃
I do hope in her horror of finding out she got her sewing needle out and made all the teddies better, after her shenananagi.....shenagagi....sleepwalkery! 😃