All in a Day

I love you so,
do you me?
You screwed around,
now I see.
It was fake,
all a lie.
Though, I saw it real
through my eyes.
That was wrong.
I'm sad to say
I hate the way
you make me feel each day,
like you're the only one
that makes it okay.
I love the way
how you look at me
as if I'm the only one
that you can see.
How could you
do this to me?
I opened up
and let you in.
I trusted you,
isn't that true?
I miss the way you said,
"I love you too."
I shouldn't though.
My heart was sold
for a decieving joke.
Why would you
fool me so?
You knew damn well
that that was low.
I believed in you,
that's so old.
Want me dead?
I do, too,
so kill me now.
Take a bow.
You ruined my life
how
you will ask?
Just think back,
and look away,
because I'm already gone.
All in a day.

Reviews

[S. Michael Long]

Another really nicely written poem, i love the simple rhyme, but Im really curious about the form again.. Its so easy to read but then the form messes me up lol. Also, there are some really interesting sections where i think redundancy could add to the impact of the writing, for example line 41 could be emphasized with something like, how how how, or how why how? i dont know its just an idea.. but i really like this poem too! -s.

[Emma Cathryn]

@ S. Michael Long Thanks!