Rejection

requiem for a broken heart

I know rejection like I know my hand

In all its abstract linear design:

My life is long, my love is pure and grand,

My luck, however, barely marks its line,

As I’m not any girl’s nor is she mine.

 

The breaking ice sends us into the water,

Where merrily we wade towards the shore.

Yet steadily she sets me for the slaughter:

A sapphic word and gesture out the door,

While I’m a writhing mess upon the floor.

 

And even if there’s hope within the air

That love would light the caverns of our eyes,

Despite assurance of no wear or tear,

The silence grows and I with soulful sighs

Still wallow in a sea of whats and whys.

 

I know rejection like I know my hand-

Much have I felt its sting upon my spine.

Now day by day I wander through the land

And wonder whether I would ever shine

If I’m not any girl’s and she's not mine.

-EDP

Reviews

[Fia Naturie]

To know rejection in this way leaves a mark. Love the way you used the hand, with all it's intricate lines. Lovely spill.

[emipoemi]

Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it.

[Andra Davis]

I do feel sad for the writer. The vulnerability comes across in your words. I hope he shines. Nicely written.

[emipoemi]

I hope he shines too. Been a while since this was written; been a while since the he's seen the sun as well. But thanks for reading. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Ken Simm.]

This is a remarkably thoughtful and true poem. It is something a lot of readers may relate to but few could couch it in such wonderful terms.

[emipoemi]

Thank you so much! Hard to feel anyone relating to any of my stuff (despite such comments) when I get so few stopping by. Glad you enjoyed.

[Thomas W Case]

Powerful work. Great flow.

[emipoemi]

thank you. Glad you enjoyed.

[Papaya]

This is so well written, and very moving.
Your flow is flawless and your rhymes move with ease.

[emipoemi]

Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Relic]

This is touching in its detail. The emotions are up front and laid out in stark reality. In glimmers of hope, the flame snuffed out time after time.

This
is sad
and
relatable.

[emipoemi]

the very intention with it. Thanks for reading.

[Lale]

"The silence grows and I with soulful sighs
Still wallow in a sea of whats and whys." I felt that
Everything can heal except being rejected. You always feel like you've done something wrong which led to rejection. You always feel not enough. It always crosses your mind. You never heal from rejection. Thank you loads for sharing.

[emipoemi]

Thank you loads for reading. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Terra]

I have no words.
This is so beautifully written.
We've all felt this feeling, felt the silence.

[emipoemi]

Have we ever - lol. Thanks for reading. Glad you enjoyed it.

[Esteban Morfín]

Thanks again for this wonderful insight into your mind. I'm glad you recurre to poetry, not just for yourself but for everyone that has the pleasure to read your work.

[emipoemi]

it's one of my goals as a writer to show myself while also being relatable to everyone else. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading.

[Samuel Dickens]

These words well express that terrible affliction. I guess we all want to be accepted and not shunned, embraced, not spurned or rejected. For some, including me, (much more so when young) rejection was like salt on a slug.

[emipoemi]

it's definitely an affliction, especially if it's relentless. Glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for reading.